Poetry

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Originally posted by milefile
Poetry does not have to rhyme, and the best poetry doesn't. Poems that rhyme sound very amateurish to me. And similar arguments can be made against prose; proper grammar can limit expression, too.

So, now that I've insulted everyone who posted their poem . . .

Nah, I'm rarely insulted by other peoples' opinions (you could just be saying that rhyme is amateurish because you can't do it :P), although you do make an interesting point. Correct grammar can limit alot of things about peoples' expressions, also, even though not by much (as colorful vocabulary and use of a variety of expressions can be helpful).
 
Originally posted by Klostrophobic
I think meter is more important than the rhyme scheme.

Yeah, meter is one of the etc. things that I mention in the essay. I think I said "rhythm, rhyme, meter and anything else that makes poetry 'sound' good"

Originally posted by milefile
Poetry does not have to rhyme, and the best poetry doesn't.

Neither does prose!

Originally posted by milefile
And similar arguments can be made against prose; proper grammar can limit expression, too.

Yeah thats a good point, though I would argue that proper grammar usually just makes things more clear. I think clarity is very important in writing. Im not a huge fan of things being vague and gauzy, etc. Theres probably some other characteristic of prose that Im completely forgetting that renders my argument totally useless, though :(.
 
Well you can definitely experiment with grammar, like any structure it has the ability to reveal and to conceal.

I prefer writing that I have heard refered to as "prose poetry". I will post a sample or two when I get a chance to scan a page.
 
Yeah, prose poetry is awesome. And Calvino is god.

Italo Calvino, Invisible Cities, "Cities and Memory 1"

Leaving there and proceeding for three days toward the east, you reach Diomira, a city with sixty silver domes, bronze statues of all the gods, streets paved with lead, a crystal theater, a golden c0ck that crows each morning on a tower. All these beauties will already be familiar to the visitor, who has seen them also in other cities. But the special quality of this city for the man who arrives there on a September evening, when the days are growing shorter and the multicolored lamps are lighted all at once at the doors of the food stalls and from a terrace a woman’s voices cries ooh!, is that he feels envy toward those who now believe they have once before lived an evening identical to this and who think they were happy, that time.

Edit: hah, it censored c0ck.
 
I made a poem.


As the wind blows, the man stares.
Slowly he begins towards
Southern directions.
He doesn't stir.
Only his mind is heard.
Lolloping through the fields of mentality.
Ever graceful.




Can anyone else do acrostic?
:lol:
 
Originally posted by milefile
Poems that rhyme sound very amateurish to me.

So, now that I've insulted everyone who posted their poem . . .
Yeah, Shakespere was kinda overrated, wasn't he? All that iambic pentameter and junk...

I wonder how many times the word "iambic" has been said on these forums...hmmm....twice before, making a grand total of 4, as of this post.
 
Hm. What a smartass. I was mostly thinking of contemporary poetry. So then it may be more accurate to say poems that rhyme sound like somebody trying to sound like Shakespere.
 
Dear self, don't finagle
Instead, enjoy a large bag of bagels
Some with raisins, some with cinnamon,
But all with gin in 'em

Always add a bit of cream cheese
It'll fend off those terrible diseases
If you feel adventurous, add a bit of jelly
Mmm, mmm, feels good in your belly

Toast 'em up real good and such
Keep 'em in too long, and chewing becomes a little much
Dear self


Beautiful
 
When I was little,and had no sense.
I took a wiz on an electric fence.
It hurt so bad,it shocked my balls.
Then I took a dump in my overalls.


beavis.jpg
:lol:
 
How does it feel to have someone just walk away
How does it feel to have someone lie all day
How does it feel to hold all urges at bay
How does it feel when you get your selfish way

How does it feel to give then take away
How does it feel to lose the sun in the day
How does it feel with the breeze at the bay
How does it feel when you lost your way

How does it feel to have love sweep you away
How does it feel to be on cloud nine all day
How does it feel to swim around the bay
How does it feel to have everything swim your way

I'll tell you how it feels today
I'll tell you how it feels and make you go away
I'll tell you how it feels and never give into your ways
I'll tell you how it feels and hold all feelings at bay

It feels like a cold winterday
A wicked wind from the north
A foggy summer morning
No, gloomier then that.
A dark Autumn Night
 
I'll make one up on the spot!

There she was
Walking down the street
Singing
Doo wa diddy

To be continued...
 
I know a girl
She has a boat with a pearl
Into some guardrail the boat had crashed
The pearl was trashed
It flew right off the machine
Her name was Christian Klien

Trouble in paradise
Someone should get Christian some ice
And buy him a horse
Who let this guy on the race course?

Christian Klien was very sad
He told his dad
He said the people were mad
No ****! Is what dad had said
Christian said it was unfair
Why didn't anybody care?
Because you lost a million dollar pearl
You stupid ass idiot!
You should be shot
On the spot
Maybe on Jenson Button's yaght
Is what I thought

But I shouldn't think or say that
Christian Klien's dad might get mad

I know where Christian hid that pearl
With a twirl
Like a girl
He put it in his ear
And like his career
It's very queer
Someone should teach Christian Klien how to steer

Now, it isn't really a pearl
He wears like a girl
It's actually a diamond
But that wouldn't fit
Because 'diamond' rhymz with Jack ****.
 
bleh, im done with english for the year.... i hate poetry
 
Originally posted by Jpec07

For this lab rat's fine'ly found
A supernat'ral guide
Who'll keep me safe and homeward-bound
And keep my pace in stride.
For on my journey through the maze
I do intend to win;
To beat the system, fair and square
And return home again.

©2003 Jpec07

If the lab rat is you, and the supernatural guide is religion, and your plan is to beat the system...

Sounds pretty hardcore to me. Would you like some explosives?
 
Now this ship is sinking
What were you thinking?
I said: GO RIGHT!
Fair enough, someone needs to rewrite
Whatever 'right' is on a boat
Now put on your raincoat
Because this boat is getting annoyingly full of water

The End
 
I travel this road everyday
but something seems different this time
I walk until I can walk no more
When I finally stop walking I meet a bend
I fall to my knees , lay down asleep
and hope that the sleep Im having will never end
 
With the sun rising that morning we five set sail.
what started off as a calm morning, quickly turned into a dark evening.
Waves started crashing while wind started blowing.
Then suddenly the wind was too strong.
Captain said "step on the gas, give me more give me more",
then in a flash we
five
became
four.
 
I write the ads
that make the world turn bad
I walk the avenue
that makes the supermodels turn blue
I kick the can
that makes the you-know-what hit the fan
I watch the show
that makes the economy go
I invite the members
of the republican nation party to my house in December
I am the guy
who makes all the little babies live and die
I invented the poety
that you can see
 
Originally posted by Klostrophobic
It doesn't even look like you started with English. How can you be done?

wat r u talking about? i speak english good
 
Originally posted by Solid Lifters
There was a kind old man named Enis,

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This is a short poem of a finnish poet, Tommy Taberman. The original version is in finnish, so this may sound like crap.


I wish that love would be wine.
Drunk I would wait for you.

And the poem "the Raven" ,that's actually a horror story, is also great. I'm not sure, but I think that it was written by Edgar Powe (sp?).
 
*digs up*

I've never really done poetry before, except for one or two I might of done in school for an assignment. Nothing on my own.

What do ya'll think?

I've shut the outside world,
Listening to my guardians.
My Devil,
My Angle,
My Sage.

Each whispers into my ears,
my mind,
my eyes.

I laugh.
I giggle.
I realize.

The outside world now seems so small.
Everything is dim compared to what I've witnessed.

Turn the slate over and shake.
I'm ready for more scribbles.
 
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