Something I wrote today in my creative writing class

[DJones]

So today in my creative writing class we had to write a description of a picture of our choice. So I chose this. http://www.porschesport.com/M09_0898.JPG
After studying the picture for quite a while here is what I came up with.

Not many know of The Green Hell. Even less know to respect the historic and tattered raceway. From its chaotic shape to its unfathomable length, only those who have driven it understand. Even the pale fans that surround it late into the night, resembling as scattered pale ghosts of drivers taken by The Green Hell to the drivers that remain. And sometimes even those that drive it do not see it for what it should. The only ones that do are those who have mastered The Green Hell and call it for what it is, Nürburg Nordschleife. These individuals that race under the ominous German sky never notice the slender unpretentious trackside lights casting their haunting glow, nor the towering trees shrouding the world with their green mask. To the spectators, the cars are no more than angry beasts churning and burning through the night blinding all in their way; but to those inside the beasts there’s no difference between driver and beast for they are the beast. What everyone else calls a car the drivers consider it to be a part of them, a mere extension to their being. The strips of young grass show their lack of fear because for every strip a driver pushed beyond the limits. The graffiti challenges them to drive faster, for death follows them dearly as they burn through the night taunting his grasp.

So what do you think? I don't have a title (The Green Hell?).
Just thought I would share with you guys.

 

[bluemoon_19]

Thats really good a really good description for people who aren't into racing. It almost scares you reading it.👍

 

[Tom]

Awesome job, keep at it!

 

[prisonermonkeys]

So what do you think? I don't have a title (The Green Hell?).
Just thought I would share with you guys.

Okay, as a teacher, and as someone who is very much into creative writing, I have to say that I think you missed the point of the exercise. This was the assignment:

So today in my creative writing class we had to write a description of a picture of our choice.

You haven't really done this at all. The picture is of a corner at the Nurburgring, but you have descirbed the whole circuit, which is not in the picture at all.

 

[CMvan46]

I'd agree with prisonermonkeys on this one. It's not that I think you've written it poorly, just missed the mark a bit.

I've always wondered how a teacher marks "creative writing." What if I think it's creative to have a plan write in the sky, "the picture is a corner of a race track?" That accurately describes the picture and it's incredibly creative over a simple pen and paper paragraph, especially if you pilot the plane yourself.

 

[Techy]

I like it. It tells the reader how aggressive and frightening Nordschleife is, even for people who heard of it for the first time or for people who never drove on it in real life. But as PrisonerMonkeys said, you should extend a bit more. To me the paragraph is more fitting as a conclusion rather than an actual basis. But I'm no teacher.

 

[DJones]

Okay, as a teacher, and as someone who is very much into creative writing, I have to say that I think you missed the point of the exercise. This was the assignment:

You haven't really done this at all. The picture is of a corner at the Nurburgring, but you have descirbed the whole circuit, which is not in the picture at all.

I did realize that while I was completing it... I had just based too much off this one picture to go find another. I tried to find more pictures from this event or similar, but the internet block is insanely strict and the computers suck. I just gave up and let the teacher think the track was a "normal" sized one.
Maybe some time soon I can come back, find some more pictures, or heck I could write I book about Nürburg and place this at the end.
Thanks guys! This is my first writing class ever and I was just curios if the teacher's enthusiasm was merely polite enthusiasm 👍