~ Ready, Steady, Go! - Chapter 55 ~ (02/03/12)(56k/MobileApp Warning!)

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Another good story! :)đź‘Ť If I were Murray Walker I may scream "Unbeliveable! Look at that! The blue Civic Type-R!!". :lol:

And this is my 900th post :D.
 
Meh, the story's alright so far but to be honest, every time I read a chapter I get bored quickly because of the fact that a 317 BHP Civic flies by the majority of racers like they're not even moving. I also don't grasp how a VTEC with a body kit fetched from the bottom of a cereal box can outmaneuver a dedicated sports car like it's nothing. It's uninteresting that way because you know exactly what's going to happen before you begin the plot: The main character of the chapter is going to win, or accomplish something extremely difficult like they're having a cup of tea. And even better; before a loss could be accomplished in "the little VTEC that could," it'll be replaced by something even more ridiculous that can probably run in circles around a sports car like a GT-R somehow.

Good luck with the story anywho, this is just me ranting like always. đź‘Ť

actually, it's not that unrealistic, because the fastest car in this race was the nsx, which has about 290 bhp stock and is rarely tuned to above 350 unless an idiot straps some turbos onto it, so a 317 bhp civic wouldn't be particularly outclassed. And a cereal box bodykit?! The story clearly shows that the civic has been tuned by a professional tuning house a la mine's or hosaka, so one can assume that thanks to innumerable upgrades to suspension, brakes, drivetrain and aerodynamics, the civic also easily qualifies as a "dedicated sports car", with superb handling just like the nsx. Oh, and a lot of the passes were thanks to Yuka's superior driving prowess :)

nice chapter again Roj. Interested to see what car dex is forced to buy :)
 
actually, it's not that unrealistic, because the fastest car in this race was the nsx, which has about 290 bhp stock and is rarely tuned to above 350 unless an idiot straps some turbos onto it, so a 317 bhp civic wouldn't be particularly outclassed. And a cereal box bodykit?! The story clearly shows that the civic has been tuned by a professional tuning house a la mine's or hosaka, so one can assume that thanks to innumerable upgrades to suspension, brakes, drivetrain and aerodynamics, the civic also easily qualifies as a "dedicated sports car", with superb handling just like the nsx. Oh, and a lot of the passes were thanks to Yuka's superior driving prowess :)

nice chapter again Roj. Interested to see what car dex is forced to buy :)

Hopefully not a MIRA or Cappuccino.
 
Meh, the story's alright so far but to be honest, every time I read a chapter I get bored quickly because of the fact that a 317 BHP Civic flies by the majority of racers like they're not even moving. I also don't grasp how a VTEC with a body kit fetched from the bottom of a cereal box can outmaneuver a dedicated sports car like it's nothing. It's uninteresting that way because you know exactly what's going to happen before you begin the plot: The main character of the chapter is going to win, or accomplish something extremely difficult like they're having a cup of tea. And even better; before a loss could be accomplished in "the little VTEC that could," it'll be replaced by something even more ridiculous that can probably run in circles around a sports car like a GT-R somehow.

Good luck with the story anywho, this is just me ranting like always. đź‘Ť
I understand the gripe. It's the same gripe that people have with Initial D. Although I'd argue that Initial D actually takes it too far sometimes. The Civic is heavily tuned like NSX>GOD said. It would beat a 20 year old NSX that probably doesn't have anywhere near as much tuning, quite easily, before you factor the drivers. Plus, if I'm going to make a chapter where the Civic loses, it's going to be a convincing loss. It would be offensive if it wasnt.

Thank you for not saying "OMFG THIS SUXORS!!!11" It's refreshing to see when someone can put forward their opinion in a nice way. :)
 
LoL a Gran Turismo Fan Fiction! I've seen more and they are very cool! Maybe I should make one? ahah. By the way your fanfic rocks and I'm waiting for the next chapter.

[I liked the reference to Kei's name in the car she will get, lol]
 
I prefer Fan Fiction Friday over at topless robot myself... but if you could incorporate some of those themes into your next race saga, perhaps in the pits, in the stands, under the hood, and some rams in the rear... you would have a winner on your hands. This just feels too clean for my tastes.
 
hmm.. I'm becoming tempted to start a fan fiction of my own, but to do what I have planned I need the skyline pace car, the one with the lights on the top. Anyone have one they'd be willing to trade for anything?

edit: I'm new to forums, so I don't know if this constitutes as being off topic or inappropriate or whatever. Please excuse me if it is
 
hmm.. I'm becoming tempted to start a fan fiction of my own, but to do what I have planned I need the skyline pace car, the one with the lights on the top. Anyone have one they'd be willing to trade for anything?

edit: I'm new to forums, so I don't know if this constitutes as being off topic or inappropriate or whatever. Please excuse me if it is

Good idea but
The lights dont work, however...
 
Roj if you went with the Kei car buying next chapter, make dex buy the Suzuki Kei WORKS. Get it? A "Kei" car for "Kei" thats called "Kei"?
 
I prefer Fan Fiction Friday over at topless robot myself... but if you could incorporate some of those themes into your next race saga, perhaps in the pits, in the stands, under the hood, and some rams in the rear... you would have a winner on your hands. This just feels too clean for my tastes.
I dont want to turn parts of the story into adult material, the furthest I'd go is hinting that such a thing happened. Just trying to keep it reasonably clean for the sake of the AUP. ;)
hmm.. I'm becoming tempted to start a fan fiction of my own, but to do what I have planned I need the skyline pace car, the one with the lights on the top. Anyone have one they'd be willing to trade for anything?

edit: I'm new to forums, so I don't know if this constitutes as being off topic or inappropriate or whatever. Please excuse me if it is
As long as you dont take over the thread, it's fine. :P

Roj if you went with the Kei car buying next chapter, make dex buy the Suzuki Kei WORKS. Get it? A "Kei" car for "Kei" thats called "Kei"?
I see what you did there. :P To keep things looking slick, I'm only using premiums for main character cars. I appreciate the suggestion though. đź‘Ť
 
Chapter 14 - Cousin, Lets Go Racing!

“Are you serious Yuka?!”
“Yeah!”
”I don’t believe some guy would randomly approach you and make such a ridiculous bet!”
“He was being mega cocky so I took advantage!”
”Still! How can he agree to such terms!”
”He was being cocky! He obviously underestimated me!”
“Yeah right!”
”I’m not lying!”

Kei got up and suddenly tackled Yuka.

”Kei!! Ow! Get off!”
“Tell me the truth or I’m going to tickle the truth out of you!”
”I am telling the truth! Don’t you dare tickle me!”
“One…”
”Kei!”
”Two…”
”Kei!!”
”Three!”
”Kei!!!”

Kei began tickling Yuka in a mad tickling frenzy. Yuka couldnÂ’t stop laughing.

“Kei!!!!!! Ahhhhhhh!!!”

Kei stopped tickling Yuka.

“You really are telling the truth, aren’t you?”
”That’s what I’ve been saying you big goof!”
“Oh Yuka!”

Kei hugged Yuka tight.

”You’re really getting me a car! Thank you so much!”
”You’re welcome Kei! Can you let me stand up now?”
”No! I must show you how grateful I am!”
“Oh you…”
“Yuka! I don’t even have a licence! I need one now!”
“How about you get off me and I’ll help you out.”
”Hmmm… Okay then!”

Kei got off and helped Yuka up.

“So what first Yuka?”
”First you go onto the internet and look for a driving school.”
”Do I have to?”
”Yes.”
“Fine… Then what are you going to do?”
“I’m going to go nap.”
“Alright then. Night Yuka.”
“Night Kei.”

Just as Yuka turned around, Kei kissed her on the cheek. Yuka started blushing.

”Oi! That’s not fair!”
”Thank you Yuka!”
“I’ll thank you Yuka your face if you ninja a kiss on me again!”
”That sounds enjoyable actually! Okay better watch out then!”
”Kei!”
”Hehehe!”

Later onÂ…

A high stakes race was taking place on route 5.

“So when are we doing this? There’s eleven of us all waiting to go.”
”Patience man, there’s still another to arrive.”
”Aw come on man, why do we have to wait for a girl?”
”She bought in like the rest of you. I’m not being called a scammer for going back on my word.”
”Someone’s coming, is that her?”

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“Maybe. She didn’t mention what car she’d be bringing.”
“Is that an R33?”

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“Yeah.”

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“She’s pulling in.”

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“That aint a she.”
“What?”

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The driver got out of the car.

”TJ?!”
”Hey fellas.”
“What you doing here? I thought you didn’t race anymore.”
”I just came to watch.”
”Well a’ight then. Nice to see you again anyway.”
”Likewise.”
”What’s with the R33 though?”
”I just finished working on it. I was giving it a test drive before I saw you guys up here.”
“Why do you need a tuned car if you just run a body shop?”
“Can’t I have a little fun?”
”I guess so, you’ve got the cash I guess.”

Another set of headlights appeared down the highway.

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”This better be her.”
”Her?”
”Yeah we’re waiting on a girl to arrive before we can start.”
”I see.”

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“I wonder if it’s Yuka…That doesn’t look like the Civic though…”

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“What sort of car is that, TJ?”
“It’s a Corvette…”
”An American car? Here?”

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“She’s pulling in.”

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The girl parked up behind TJÂ’s R33 and stepped out of her car.

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“Hey boys.”

The girl walked over to the group.

“She looks just like Yuka… But she doesn’t sound like Yuka.”

She eyed up TJÂ’s R33 as she walked by it.

”Who’s R33 is this?”
”Mine.”
“Nice car. We don’t get these in the US. Straight six right?”
“Yeah. You’ve got a V8 right?”
”Of course. American muscle all the way.”
“You’re from America?”
”The accent didn’t give it away?”
“I’m sorry, I mean, you brought your car here from America?”
”Yeah. Can’t leave home without it. Anyway I best go over to the other drivers, later.”
“See ya.”

The girl walked back to her car.

”By the way, I’m TJ, nice to meet you.”
“Hitomi. Nice to meet you too.”

Hitomi got back into the car and drove off down the highway.

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“That’s one badass Corvette…”

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“Alright, she’s ready. Lets get this party started! Five laps of the special route! Lets go!”

Starting Grid
1. White MineÂ’s Skyline GT-R
2. Orange HPA TT
3. White Amuse S2000 GT1
4. Silver Nismo 400R
5. Silver HPA Golf
6. Red HKS CT230R
7. HitomiÂ’s Orange Chevrolet Corvette Z06 C5
8. Red Nismo Skyline GT-R R-Tune
9. White Gran Turismo Skyline GT-R
10. White MineÂ’s Skyline GT-R
11. White Gran Turismo 350Z
12. White Amuse 380RS Super Leggera


“The legend of the R will succeed today.”

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“Audi are the reason cars like the GT-R exist. It’s time to show these guys that Audi are superior even now!”

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“Everyone raves on about the GT1 Turbo, but it’s a known fact that the regular GT1 can take corners faster.”

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“This 400R may be old, but it’s not old tech. These guys in front wont know what hit them!”

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“HPA power!”

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“Headlights are for fools! My stealth attacks will enable victory here today.”

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“These guys look tough, but they aren’t V8’s.”

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“Nismo did a great job tuning this car, time to do it justice.”

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“This R34 will win with ease after being graced by Gran Turismo’s own tuners.”

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“Look at my lights, my lights are amazing!”

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“Modified Z’s are still yet to be taken seriously, time to change that.”

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“This isn’t amusing, starting in last like this.”

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“Go go go!”

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“Turn your headlights on you goof! You obviously cant see the huge gap you’ve left!”

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“Yoink!”

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“What’s the matter? Is your turbo lagging? Should’ve gone for a larger motor to suit your needs.”

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“Out of the way Golfy! Make room for a proper car!”

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“Sheesh it’s like a queue here!”

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“Blocking me eh? Cheap move.”

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“Lets see what you’ve got…”

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“Too wide!”

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“Gotcha!”

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“I thought I’d have some competition here.”

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“Only three more guys to pass? This race wont last five laps at all!”

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“I’m not catching as quickly as I thought, this makes things interesting.”

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“Main straight coming up.”

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“Damn! They’re leaving me behind!”

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“Lets kick it up a gear then!”

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“The American girl caught up?

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Hitomi kept up the pressure on the S2000 in front. Staying right behind it through the corners and straights.

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“You made the same mistake that Skyline did!”

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“Two to go.”

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“Cant you go faster in your poor man’s R8?”

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“I bet you want me up your tailpipes like this, don’t you?”

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“Unfortunately for you, I’m not into that.”

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“But I am into kicking your candy ass all over this highway!”

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“Edging ahead…Lets show them true power!”

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“Slipstreaming me? Very clever, but you wont pass me before the tunnel!”

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“Crap, this guy still.”

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“Corvette girl, why do you insist on trying to obtain first?”

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“How the hell am I supposed to catch him if he’s cornering as fast as me?!”

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“You guys aren’t helping with your constant pressure!”

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“I know! Shortcut!”

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“Now I get it. You cant brake as hard as I can.”

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“Silly girl with your silly car, this isn’t a drift contest.”
”Damn it, understeer!”

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“Saved it!”

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“You return.”

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“You’re not losing me here again!”

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“Come on Corvette! Faster!”

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“That’s it!”

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“Go!”

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“You have power, but do you have the control to go with it?”

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“Impressive.”
“Hell yeah!”

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Hitomi kept up the pace, leaving the other competitors behind.

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“Last lap!”

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Hitomi stayed hard on the throttle, giving it her best despite already having a comfortable lead.

“Haha! Bit too close there!”

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“Finish! Yes! More money towards the project!”

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Hitomi stopped and parked up beside TJÂ’s R33 and got out, admiring the R33 beside her.

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Tech Specs
Car: Chevrolet Corvette Z06 (C5) ‘04
Owner: Hitomi
Drivetrain: FR
Power: 495 BHP
Weight: 1300 KG


Tech Specs
Car: Nissan Skyline GT-R V-Spec (R33) ‘97
Owner: TJ
Drivetrain: 4WD
Power: 661 BHP
Weight: 1247 KG


TJ ran over to Hitomi.

“Hey, wait up a second.”
“Hmm?”
“I need to ask you something, please don’t take offence.”
“As long as you’re not asking me out.”
”No, nothing like that. I just wanted to know, do you know a girl called Yuka? I know it sounds wrong but you look just like her so I was wondering.”
“Lives in Gion?”
”Yeah. She lives with a friend and drives a Civic. Do you know her?”
”Know her? Of course! She’s my cousin! Our mothers were twin sisters.”
“Your cousin?!”
”I didn’t know little Yuka still had that cute little red Civic.”
”Red? She has a blue one.”
”Oh? Wow has it really been that long since I last spoke to her?”
“Want to go see her? I can take you.”
”Don’t worry, I know my way around.”
“It’s just I live in Gion too…”
”Well you’ll just have to keep up then, wont you?”

Hitomi quickly got back into her Corvette and launched it out of the parking area, pulling a huge drift and leaving TJ choking on the clouds of smoke.

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“Damn she hoons more than Yuka does!”

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“I cant wait to see my little cousin’s face when she sees me!”

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Great chapter, so it's Hitomi with her derpy-eyed C5 Corvette.

By teh way, I feel a bit awkward to say this but was Yuka wearing white panties that time she was tied to teh tree? :lol:
 
Is it wrong that I could picture Kei tackling Yuka?
 
Great chapter, so it's Hitomi with her derpy-eyed C5 Corvette.

By teh way, I feel a bit awkward to say this but was Yuka wearing white panties that time she was tied to teh tree? :lol:
Yeah. I noticed if you flick the high beams off, the left headlight is dimmer than the right. :lol:

Pink. :P
Is it wrong that I could picture Kei tackling Yuka?
Yes, you dirty, dirty man. :P
nice chapter, and are Yuka and Hitomi gonna go bowling next? ;)

Another time, cousin. :sly:
 
Chapter 15 - Yo Dawg I Heard You Like Kei’s

Kei was in the bath while Yuka browsed on the internet. There was a knock at the door.

”Who’s calling at this hour? Bloody hell…”

Yuka went down and answered the door.

”The hell? Hitomi?”
”Yuka my cousin!”

Hitomi grabbed Yuka and hugged her tight.

”It’s been too long!”
”Hitomi! What are you doing here in Japan?”
“I’ve been here for a week already! I had a business meeting but it got cancelled, so I decided to ship my car over and have some fun whilst I’m here. I was going to call you but I couldn’t reach you on your phone and you never answer your e-mails!”
”Oh! I’ve changed my number and e-mail address! Sorry!”
”It’s alright. I ran into a friend of yours at route 5, which is how I found you.”
”Which friend?”
”Ehhh, TJ or something.”
”Oh TJ, he’s a good mechanic.”
”Boyfriend?”
”No!”
”Potential boyfriend?”
”Stop it!”
“Yuka! Don’t tell me you don’t have a boyfriend?”
“Do you want to come inside or not?”
”Yeah sure.”

Yuka eyed up the Corvette behind Hitomi.

”Still got that old thing?”
”Don’t you be dissing my Vette!”

Yuka giggled and walked back into the apartment, Hitomi followed and closed the door behind her.

“Nice place. Are you sharing it with someone?”
”Yeah. She’s in the bath though.”
”Should I go and say hi?”
”Nah, she won’t hear you anyway. She just lays there for an hour and listens to her iPod.”

Yuka sat down in front of her computer. She pulled up a chair beside her.

”Sit down.”

Hitomi sat down beside Yuka.
“Before we stopped talking, you had a red Civic.”
”Yeah I did.”
”Then how come you have a blue one now?”
“I wrecked the red one and replaced it with that blue Type R.”
”Bad wreck?”
”Wrapped it around a tree.”
”Ouch. Were you okay?”
”Yeah, I just had a few cuts and bruises.”
”Oh that’s good then, as long as you’re okay. At least you got a better car afterwards.”
”Yeah I love my new Civic. You still have that Corvette then? I remember you bought it the same day I got my old Civic.”
”Yeah that was a funny co-incidence, especially considering I was in the US at the time.”
“How’s it been treating you?”
”Pretty well. The engine is still going strong but the suspension is feeling worn out, especially after test driving a new ZR-1.”
”Thinking of trading in?”
“Not anytime soon. Anyway Yuka, since my meeting got cancelled, I want to ask you something.”
“Hmm?”
”How would you like to come to Europe with me?”
”To do what?”
”Race. Europe is full of hotshot racers who think they’re the best at everything. I want to go there and beat them on their home turf, with their own cars.”
”I’d have to get time off work first…”
”The money we’ll win in Europe will easily cover your absence at work, trust me.”
“Alright then, lets do it!”
“Yeah! That’s my little cousin!”

Kei emerged from the bathroom, wrapped in a soaking wet towel.

”Hey Yuka. Hey, erm…”
”Kei, this is my cousin, Hitomi.”
”Oh hello!”

Hitomi looked away.

”Hey… I’ll give you some privacy.”
”Oh don’t worry about it Hitomi, we’re all girls here.”

Yuka glared at Kei.

”I’ll just get dressed in the other room, see you in a minute!”

Hitomi turned back to Yuka.

”Does she always do that?”
”Yeah.”
”Doesn’t she care what’ll happen if her towel drops?”
”Wouldn’t be the first time. Lighten up Hitomi! Like Kei said, we’re all girls here.”
“What?! And do you…?”
”Do what? Walk around with a towel on? Sure why not?”
”It just seems… Odd.”
”Me and Kei are close. That’s all.”
”Right… Anyway Yuka, I’m going to head off back to the hotel. I’ll come back tomorrow and we’ll go do something.”
”Okay Hitomi.”

Yuka walked Hitomi to the door, giving her a hug on the way out.

”Great to see you again Hitomi! See you tomorrow!”
”See you tomorrow little cousin!”

Hitomi walked over to her Corvette, giving Yuka a last wave before getting into the car and driving off. Yuka waved back and closed the door.

”So she’s your cousin eh?”
”Yeah. We haven’t seen each other for years.”
”I could tell. She’s hilarious, looking away when I came out of the shower.”
”She was only trying to be respectful since she doesn’t know you.”
”I know but it’s still funny, especially with you still facing me. No respect for me huh?”
”Well I’ve seen it all anyway. Another look wont hurt.”
”Yuka!”

Yuka laughed.

”Okay, okay. Nude shenanigans aside, you still haven’t told me what car you want.”
”Oh yeah! I printed out a bunch of brochures for you to see. Can you help me pick one?”
”A little role reversal eh? Alright let me see.”

Kei brought Yuka over to the bedroom and spread a bunch of brochures across the bed.

“Take a look.”

Daihatsu OFC-1 Concept ‘07

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“This is a concept car, Kei.”
“In 2007 it was. It should be released by now.”

Yuka facepalmed.

“Okay moving on.”

Mazda Autozam AZ-1 ‘92

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“Oh AZ-1’s are pretty good.”
”Really? I think they look cute.”
”Okay we’ll put this one beside us for now.”

Mitsubishi i-MiEV ‘09

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“This is an electric car, Kei.”
”Is that good?”
”Not really…”
”How come?”
”They’re slow and don’t have as much range as a regular car.”
”Oh forget this one then.”

Kei tossed the brochure on the floor and handed Yuka another one.

Suzuki Cappuccino (EA21R) ‘95

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“Is this good?”
”Probably the best one so far.”
”Better than the AZ-1?”
”Yeah.”
”Okay put this in the pile too.”

Suzuki Cervo SR ‘07

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“This one is good if you don’t care much for performance.”
”So it’s quite slow?”
”Mhm.”
”Erm… But it’s still good?”
”Yeah it’s economical and easy to drive.”
”Okay put that in the pile too then.”

Daihatsu Copen Active Top ‘02

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“It’s a shoe.”
”I like it!”
”Well it’s alright I guess…”
”In the pile it goes!”
“Sigh…”

Yuka looked at the pile of cars.

“So out of the six you picked out, we only managed to remove two…”
“Should we continue this tomorrow Yuka?”
”Yeah, it’s about time we slept anyway.”
 
“So out of the six you picked out, we only managed to remove two…”

And one of them isn't a production car, and the other one sounds like my old kettle.

I just noticed the Cappuccino in your story is exactly the same as the one in my Story.
 
And one of them isn't a production car, and the other one sounds like my old kettle.

I just noticed the Cappuccino in your story is exactly the same as the one in my Story.

Really? I didnt realise. :lol: The one in my story is actualy this one.
 
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