The Journey To "The Ring" - Chapter 8.5 - Nunquam timent mori (Part 2)
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Rated PG-16? R?
One or the other, for god's sake
It's called romance! Its that wrong?
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- Kawauchi2568
You, my friend, sadly failed in writing romance. You could have used words to picture everything.
Just a tip, don't use too much pictures. Real writers use words themselves to sketch out a situation. I know you write this just for the heck of it, but just don't use unnecessary photos, anyway they are strictly optional.
Just a tip, don't use too much pictures. Real writers use words themselves to sketch out a situation. I know you write this just for the heck of it, but just don't use unnecessary photos, anyway they are strictly optional.
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Well yeah, pardon me for acting like a smartass, but I hope you'd stick that piece of advice in your brain too.
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I laughed at how blunt Alex was about it. 👍 Great work
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School in progress...
Might be a while before I get my hands on the PS3. This recent chapter made me feel like a total idiot
Might be a while before I get my hands on the PS3. This recent chapter made me feel like a total idiot
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- Cebu
- SayakaMiki1337
- Kawauchi2568
School in progress...
Might be a while before I get my hands on the PS3. This recent chapter made me feel like a total idiot
Been there done that, that's kinda why I closed my old fanfic.
Don't worry, you can edit the last chapter if you want, but soon enough you'll get over it...
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School in progress...
Might be a while before I get my hands on the PS3. This recent chapter made me feel like a total idiot
Don't worry guy! I have done some bad chapters, you always make good ones
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Sorry for the lack of new chapter's. I need to take a break for now.
I hope that's ok.
I hope that's ok.
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I'm planning to continue the story...if I can...
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Chapter 7.7 - New Threads
The gang woke up the next morning and ate and quick but hearty breakfast.
They left at around 7:00PM and managed to fit in Alex's car.
"Are we there yet?"
"No."
"Are we there yet?"
"No."
"Are we there yet?"
"Yup."
"But were in the middle of traffic!"
"Ha ha! Just kidding!"
After 15 minutes of driving, they finally arrived at a store,which looks like any any other store.
The floor was made of hardwood and the ceiling was lined with florescent lights. Racing suit's of all color's we're arranged neatly on their racks while helmets were placed on shelves.
"Ok. Erica,Jake you've got until 12 noon to find your own racing suits."
"And if we don't find one by that time?"
"We'll go for lunch...then come back."
"No need to wait for us..."
"Why?"
" 'Cause I think we found what we want!"
Erica went towards a pink and white racing suit while Jake reached for the red racing suit.
Then, they went for the helmets shelf, Erica grabbed a pink helmet with a
chequered flag while Jake reached for a red and white helmet.
Both of them walked towards the dressing room and showed their uniforms to
Alex,Lucia & Francis.
"*Opens helmet visor* I look hot don't I?"
"Hell yeah!"
"Hmm... looks fine..."
"Yup. This is fine."
After changing back to their clothes, Alex,Erica & Jake went up to the counter.But suddenly something caught Alex's eye.
"Yo! *Snaps finger* What's wrong?"
"*Laughs*"
"What? What's wrong with saying 'yo'?"
"That's the first time you ever said 'yo', you know"
"Hang on... hold this for a sec."
Alex walked toward a racing suit in a solitary rack. It was colored blue & red.
He seized it and went to the shelf full of helmets and tried to find it's pair.
Then he went to the dressing room and tried it on.
"Well...?"
"I always knew you were gonna get that..."
"What about the one I gave you?"
"Give it to Francis probably."
"I bet he also likes blue."
"He used to like everything I liked when we we're kids"
"Then I bet he's gonna like it."
"Of course I will!"
"Then then we're all happy! Right?"
*Nods Head*
*Nods Head*
Then, Alex handed over the suits & helmets to the counter and paid.
He took them and went of back to the streets of Tokyo
To be continued...
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This is deathly dull.
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I just read ALL of your chapters. I have two things to say.
1. I NEED MOAR CHAPTERS NAO. But if school is on the way it's understandable.
2. There goes my fan-fic (I had the same idea, not joking, following a drivers career meeting people from his childhood days.)
1. I NEED MOAR CHAPTERS NAO. But if school is on the way it's understandable.
2. There goes my fan-fic (I had the same idea, not joking, following a drivers career meeting people from his childhood days.)
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Finally done w/ Ch.8 Pictures. I'm gonna start making it right now.
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you should keep doing this or have someone help or SOMETHING. Just finished reading all the chapters as well & if you continue then i can't wait to read because your story is awesome so far. I didn't mind the romance, gave the characters more emotion (not that they didn't have any). You have a great mind for writing/story telling, keep using it please. Unless you don't want to make people happy! Haha jk
plus i will probably glued to spec 2.0 by then
plus i will probably glued to spec 2.0 by then
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Thank for the great feedback! Yes, I could use some help because I can only do chapter's on weekends because I'm still at school (3rd year or junior year).
My arms are wide open to any help from my reader's.
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Chapter 8 - The Angel takes flight
"I'm not gonna be the one racing this time..."
All:"WHY?!"
"Because in the next race, we need an FR car."
"Why can't you drive my S2000?"
"According to the the rules only the owner of the car we're going to enter can drive the car."
"That's so unfair! You saw how I drove back at Tsukuba, right?"
"Don't worry,you just have to focus and don't brake late or overshoot the turn. Especially the first turn,your gonna have to break pretty hard there."
"I can't do it!"
"Yes you can. Listen, I'll help you in the race. I'll tell you when to break, when to overtake, everything! All you have to do is listen and do what I say. Think you can do that?"
*Nods head*
"That's my girl... *Kisses head*"
"Ready?"
"Ready!"
"Ok then, suit up."
A few minutes later...
"...Well, how do I look...?"
"Great."
"I agree but but you have to tie up your your hair."
"Aww... I don't wanna!"
"Sorry but you have to..."
"Oh all right..."
While the team was preparing the car, one of the drivers approached Erica.
"Hey babe!"
"..."
"Hey, yo I'm talkin' to ya!"
"What's your problem 'Yo'?"
"Hey, babe nice car."
"Call me babe one more time, And I'll send your 🤬 straight to your car's bonnet!"
"Whatever girl. You ain't gonna catch me anyways."
"WHAT DID YOU SAY?!"
"You heard what I said, your ride ain't got power to keep up with my BMW M Coupe."
"HEY YOU! GET BACK IN YOUR PITS! DON'T MESS WITH MY DRIVER!"
"Don't worry Erica, we slipped in something special in the S2000."
PA System:"ALL DRIVERS TO YOUR CARS PLEASE, ALL DRIVERS TO YOUR CARS!"
"Good luck!"
"Thanks!"
As Erica separated from the group, she went to the S2000 while Alex and the rest of the team headed towards pitwall control centre.
Starting Grid
1.Nissan Fairlady Z (Z32)
2.BMW M3
3.Mercedes-Benz SL 500
4.BMW M Coupe
5.Toyota Aristo V300
6.Honda S2000 Driven by Erica
7.Chevrolet Corvette Grand Sport
8.BMW 135i Coupe
9.BMW Z4
10.Mazda RX-8
"It might not be a Beamer but still put's up a fight!"
"That chick's S2000's nothing compared to my M3."
"Fast & luxurious. Just the way I like it."
"Pure German Muscle!"
"This might be a family car, but it has the heart of a sports car"
"Let's teach these boy's a lesson S2000!"
"I'll win this american muscle"
"I don't care if there's four more BMW's. Mine's the best!"
"It doesn't matter if i lose. At least I have a nice car."
"Never underestimate a car with a rotary engine"
"We got the green! Go go go!!"
"Yee haw!!"
"Watch out! The 'Vette is making its move"
"And so am I!"
"Ha Ha!"
"Excuse me comin' through!"
"Aww man this is easy!"
"I know! These guy's drive like 🤬!"
"This'll give him the message!"
M Coupe Driver:"Ahh!! That 🤬!"
"See ya later boys! *Muwah*"
As Erica passed the pit boxes, the boys reached out & waved their hands
at the Purple S2000.
"WOOOO!!! YEAH!!! THAT'S MY GIRL!!!
"Your next!"
"Countersteer! Countersteer!"
"*Screams*"
The hit was so hard, Erica's head banged the steering wheel but managed to
keep her grip on the wheel.
"AH!"
"ERI! ARE YOU OK?!"
"Yeah.. I'm fine"
"Actually this is kinda fun!"
"I know but remember you need to go fast!"
"Oh yeah I forgot."
" 'Cmon! Faster!"
"Guess who's back?"
"That's for smashing my car!"
Mercedes-Benz SL 500 Driver:"You hit me first!"
"Whatever 🤬!"
"Last 2 cars. KEEP GOING!"
"Time to give him the sucker punch!"
M3 Driver:"How did those two catch up?!"
"It's called slipstreaming you dummy!"
"Wow. These breaks are powerful!"
"YOUR SMOKED!"
"OH NO!"
"Hurry! Get back on the tarmac!"
"I can handle this!"
Alex & Jake:"She's a natural!"
Alex in his mind:"Yeah...She is..."
"GET HIM! GO GO GO!"
"Ok. Your really asking for it now!"
"*growl*"
"Woah! Easy tiger!"
"I'm gonna get you!"
"He going too wide!"
"BIG MISTAKE!"
" 'Cmon Eri home stretch!"
"GOOOO!!! GOOOO!!!"
"Hows that boys!"
"YEAH BABY!"
"BOO YA! KISS MY 🤬!"
After Erica drove around the track for a victory lap, she returned to the pits
to celebrate with the rest of the team. Then, they felt somebody was behind them. Then a girl with long,flat hair with a part if it covering one of her eyes.
It was Erica's high school rival,Elena Lopez.
She was wearing a racing suit,clapping silently and had a malicious smile on her face.
"Well done Erica..."
"So your a race car driver too huh?"
Elena placed her hands on her hips and said,
"I'm surprised your pitiful excuse for a car smoked my M3"
"Excuse me?",Erica blurted. Her eyes looking menacing.
"You heard me? I think your car is 🤬!"
"Why you little!",then Erica tried to grab Elena but Alex & Jake were quicker.
"Woah! Enough! Enough!"
"He's right!"
"Let...go!!"
"Honestly don't you have anything better to do than disturb us?"
"As a matter of fact I do."
Then Elena walked away and headed for the VIP area. Then a hidden figure emerged from the shadows.
"I know you're there..."
?:"So are they good?"
"They seem to be confident behind the wheel..."
?:"...Perfect..."
To be continued...
"I'm not gonna be the one racing this time..."
All:"WHY?!"
"Because in the next race, we need an FR car."
"Why can't you drive my S2000?"
"According to the the rules only the owner of the car we're going to enter can drive the car."
"That's so unfair! You saw how I drove back at Tsukuba, right?"
"Don't worry,you just have to focus and don't brake late or overshoot the turn. Especially the first turn,your gonna have to break pretty hard there."
"I can't do it!"
"Yes you can. Listen, I'll help you in the race. I'll tell you when to break, when to overtake, everything! All you have to do is listen and do what I say. Think you can do that?"
*Nods head*
"That's my girl... *Kisses head*"
"Ready?"
"Ready!"
"Ok then, suit up."
A few minutes later...
"...Well, how do I look...?"
"Great."
"I agree but but you have to tie up your your hair."
"Aww... I don't wanna!"
"Sorry but you have to..."
"Oh all right..."
While the team was preparing the car, one of the drivers approached Erica.
"Hey babe!"
"..."
"Hey, yo I'm talkin' to ya!"
"What's your problem 'Yo'?"
"Hey, babe nice car."
"Call me babe one more time, And I'll send your 🤬 straight to your car's bonnet!"
"Whatever girl. You ain't gonna catch me anyways."
"WHAT DID YOU SAY?!"
"You heard what I said, your ride ain't got power to keep up with my BMW M Coupe."
"HEY YOU! GET BACK IN YOUR PITS! DON'T MESS WITH MY DRIVER!"
"Don't worry Erica, we slipped in something special in the S2000."
PA System:"ALL DRIVERS TO YOUR CARS PLEASE, ALL DRIVERS TO YOUR CARS!"
"Good luck!"
"Thanks!"
As Erica separated from the group, she went to the S2000 while Alex and the rest of the team headed towards pitwall control centre.
Starting Grid
1.Nissan Fairlady Z (Z32)
2.BMW M3
3.Mercedes-Benz SL 500
4.BMW M Coupe
5.Toyota Aristo V300
6.Honda S2000 Driven by Erica
7.Chevrolet Corvette Grand Sport
8.BMW 135i Coupe
9.BMW Z4
10.Mazda RX-8
"It might not be a Beamer but still put's up a fight!"
"That chick's S2000's nothing compared to my M3."
"Fast & luxurious. Just the way I like it."
"Pure German Muscle!"
"This might be a family car, but it has the heart of a sports car"
"Let's teach these boy's a lesson S2000!"
"I'll win this american muscle"
"I don't care if there's four more BMW's. Mine's the best!"
"It doesn't matter if i lose. At least I have a nice car."
"Never underestimate a car with a rotary engine"
"We got the green! Go go go!!"
"Yee haw!!"
"Watch out! The 'Vette is making its move"
"And so am I!"
"Ha Ha!"
"Excuse me comin' through!"
"Aww man this is easy!"
"I know! These guy's drive like 🤬!"
"This'll give him the message!"
M Coupe Driver:"Ahh!! That 🤬!"
"See ya later boys! *Muwah*"
As Erica passed the pit boxes, the boys reached out & waved their hands
at the Purple S2000.
"WOOOO!!! YEAH!!! THAT'S MY GIRL!!!
"Your next!"
"Countersteer! Countersteer!"
"*Screams*"
The hit was so hard, Erica's head banged the steering wheel but managed to
keep her grip on the wheel.
"AH!"
"ERI! ARE YOU OK?!"
"Yeah.. I'm fine"
"Actually this is kinda fun!"
"I know but remember you need to go fast!"
"Oh yeah I forgot."
" 'Cmon! Faster!"
"Guess who's back?"
"That's for smashing my car!"
Mercedes-Benz SL 500 Driver:"You hit me first!"
"Whatever 🤬!"
"Last 2 cars. KEEP GOING!"
"Time to give him the sucker punch!"
M3 Driver:"How did those two catch up?!"
"It's called slipstreaming you dummy!"
"Wow. These breaks are powerful!"
"YOUR SMOKED!"
"OH NO!"
"Hurry! Get back on the tarmac!"
"I can handle this!"
Alex & Jake:"She's a natural!"
Alex in his mind:"Yeah...She is..."
"GET HIM! GO GO GO!"
"Ok. Your really asking for it now!"
"*growl*"
"Woah! Easy tiger!"
"I'm gonna get you!"
"He going too wide!"
"BIG MISTAKE!"
" 'Cmon Eri home stretch!"
"GOOOO!!! GOOOO!!!"
"Hows that boys!"
"YEAH BABY!"
"BOO YA! KISS MY 🤬!"
After Erica drove around the track for a victory lap, she returned to the pits
to celebrate with the rest of the team. Then, they felt somebody was behind them. Then a girl with long,flat hair with a part if it covering one of her eyes.
It was Erica's high school rival,Elena Lopez.
She was wearing a racing suit,clapping silently and had a malicious smile on her face.
"Well done Erica..."
"So your a race car driver too huh?"
Elena placed her hands on her hips and said,
"I'm surprised your pitiful excuse for a car smoked my M3"
"Excuse me?",Erica blurted. Her eyes looking menacing.
"You heard me? I think your car is 🤬!"
"Why you little!",then Erica tried to grab Elena but Alex & Jake were quicker.
"Woah! Enough! Enough!"
"He's right!"
"Let...go!!"
"Honestly don't you have anything better to do than disturb us?"
"As a matter of fact I do."
Then Elena walked away and headed for the VIP area. Then a hidden figure emerged from the shadows.
"I know you're there..."
?:"So are they good?"
"They seem to be confident behind the wheel..."
?:"...Perfect..."
To be continued...
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