Red-Line

[nd 4 holden spd]

@ VTiRoj - what do you mean by "Tori getting some hot....chocolate.....later in the story" ??

*edit - Chapter 14 is edited, I decided to lengthen the part on the restaurant and replaced "Sweden" with Switzerland..,

Oh, I think you know what "hot chocolate" means.*laughs foolishly like little school girl* Get the root of where I'm coming from yet? Perhaps you can't get over a mental hump to see where I'm coming from? Well mount your horse and be on you merry way, we don't want to spoil your innocence with our nonsense. We wouldn't want that Civic to explode while Tori is driving it. Too far?

 

[VTiRoj]

RJ and N4HS got it.

And yeah, too far holden.

Oh, and about the Skyline photo, it wont happen. Instead there will be a white Impreza Wagon... *whistles innocently*

 

[nd 4 holden spd]

RJ and N4HS got it.

And yeah, too far holden.

Oh, and about the Skyline photo, it wont happen. Instead there will be a white Impreza Wagon... *whistles innocently*

You know what they say about small cars and drivers compensating. It will be someone in a white Commodore SS.

Edit:

 

[Skygrasper550]

Oh, I think you know what "hot chocolate" means.*laughs foolishly like little school girl* Get the root of where I'm coming from yet? Perhaps you can't get over a mental hump to see where I'm coming from? Well mount your horse and be on you merry way, we don't want to spoil your innocence with our nonsense. We wouldn't want that Civic to explode while Tori is driving it. Too far?

Oooooohh!! I get it.., you naughty boys! (points at you 3) i'm not going that far, noooooo..,

RJ and N4HS got it.

And yeah, too far holden.

Oh, and about the Skyline photo, it wont happen. Instead there will be a white Impreza Wagon... *whistles innocently*

actually, I just got me a white Impreza Wagon GF a few hours ago! Finally!! But no, no one's picture is going to appear, 'kay??

 

[mustangGT90210]

Definately gonna be a guy with his blingin' red 3000GT.

Yes, the same guy that will make a new chapter soon.

 

[bergauk]

Awesome chapter.

Yes, the same guy that will make a new chapter soon.

*hands you pen*

 

[Skygrasper550]

Red-Line Chapter 15 : The Dogfight at the Alps​

The alps were breath-taking. I wonder what challenges awaits us here....


As soon as the plane landed, we were all in a hurry to get our stuff ready and head to our settlement. Once there, Kairi talked to us, "You two need to rest, because tomorrow we will participate in the local races near the outskirts of the city."
-"Hai, Kagiyama-san."
-"Hai, Kagiyama-san."
"Oh, and you can call me Kairi, Kagiyama is just too long for a name." (smiles)
Kyosuke answers, -"Yes, Kagi--..err....Kairi-san."

After having dinner at the dining area near the front lobby, I headed back to the room, to my bed and lie, while getting the photo in my pocket Zinaida gave me. I looked at it, "I'll definitely go back for her! Zinaida, you just wait, after this is all over...."

Suddenly Kyosuke entered the room. "Hey Tori, back in France, how'd it feel driving off-road once in a while?"
-"Uh..it was a different kind of challenge. To be honest, I have never driven on snow before."
"Oh, so you never had any off-road racing experience, I see."
-"How about you, Kyosuke-san? Do you have any experience?"
"Me?? Well, a little. It was a requirement in Kairi-san's school that we should be flexible, capable of driving in different kinds of terrain."
"Oh I see, lucky for you you already have driven on roads other than tarmac."
-"Yeah....hmm, we should be getting some sleep, the scene of the local races is quite far from here, Kairi-san said."

*the next day*


We went to the location of the said races, with our support vans. This was an official race scene approved by the town and sponsored by some companies, so we are allowed to choose our opponents and set up our cars before the race.

As soon as we got here, I can already see some of the cars in the race track passing by...

Discussions and plans were made. "Kyosuke, since Tori-san has raced back in France, it's your turn now."
-"Yes, Kairi-san."
"Yamato, let's get the Evo ready. Where are the dirt tires??"
-"They're right in one of the support vans. We'll go get them."
"Good. We're going to make a lot of adjustments on your car Kyosuke, this may take a while. Can you still remember the techniques on off-road racing I taught you?"
-"Hai."
"Excellent. Now we just need---"

We heard a loud voice. "Well well well, if it isn't Kairi Kagiyama. The champ whom we all used to go after in every race back then, haha."

-"Good to see you again, Hayashi. I'd like to introduce to you Tori Akawa and Kyosuke Maiyuki. *turns to us* Kyosuke, Tori, this is Hayashi Katsuhiko."

"So, are these two young boys....?"
-"Yes."
"I see, you've already started on your team. As a warm welcome, I'd like to challenge one of your boys. *he looks at Kyosuke* I pick the taller one."
-"Kyosuke?"
"(nods head, then bows at Kairi's old friend, or Hayashi) I am honored to race with you."
-"Save the gratitude for later, after the race. Better hurry with his car Kairi, my race is coming up after the next two events, and I just picked my opponent."
"Yes, we're already on it."
-"I'm also gonna check my car. See you later." The he left.

"Kyosuke, you must be at your driving best. Stay focused and alert. That man is one of the best race drivers I've ever known."

After an hour, Kyosuke's race was now about to begin. As he lined up to the starting line, I noticed his opponent, the same car I saw a while ago. Hey, wait a minute, that's a WRC race car!! And that's the man we met just an hour ago!! Kyosuke doesn't stand a chance against that!!

I was getting very nervous. But still, the race has to continue, it can't be stopped. Race 8, begin!!

[POV Shift]


"Let's see if Kairi has taught you right."
"I can do this, I just have to stay on top of my game."

"He's fast..."

"Impressive. Looks like Kairi still knows his stuff until now."

"Kairi-san said I should keep calm and composed. All right..."

"You're not half bad..."

"Kairi's favorite move: going side-by-side with his opponent." *chuckles*

"Not good, he has the inside. I'll pass him on the next corner."

"Hey hey, a bit cheesy are we?? I'm just getting started, time to get serious. I was just playing around back then."

"You need more practice!"
"?? Has he been just slowing down his pace back then? All right, I'm getting pumped up!"

"Hmmm, I'm surprised I can't shake him off, after I regained my lead. Kairi, it seems you've been doing well on teaching and passing on your skills. Excellent."

"I like the way my Evo goes airborne. If I viewed my car from a spectator's standpoint, it would look cool."

"All right, time to pull off a win."
"He's getting nearer and nearer. C'mon boy, which one? Outside or inside?"

"!! The outside?!"

"Just a little more..."
"He's taking his chances!"

"I have you now!!"
"I'm not done yet!"

"He clearly passed me, he's better than I thought. Kairi, it looks like you have outdone yourself..."

"...or have I gone rusty??"

*chuckles* "Guess I'm getting too old for this kind of stuff...."

[POV Shift]


I can't believe it. Kyosuke won. He won against a real race driver, his road car won against a rally-bred machine. Everyone in the crowds was stunned."

As they returned, Hayashi got out of his car. He was......smiling. And clapping his hands.

"Kairi, it seems like I should retire like you. My skillls have grown rusty, hahaha!"
-"Maybe you should, before you humiliate yourself further, haha! Just kidding."
"Well, what can I say...*he pats Kyosuke on the shoulder* Your boys here's a fine race driver. Kairi, you did an excellent job of teaching him. What's say I treat you three out for dinner??"
-"That would be a great idea."

*later that day*

Hayashi treated us to a five-star restaurant. While we were eating, he opened up a conversation.

"Say Kairi, after this, where are you headed next??"
-"Let's see......I was thinking of some circuit racing, so maybe we'll head to Germany."
"I heard there's a new race track over there that had just opened recently. Those who drove on the course say it's pretty good, especially if you want to practice on racing lines."

Racing Lines?? I asked myself.

"But for goodness' sake Kairi, don't take them to the Nurburgring, they're not yet ready! Haha!"
-"I know, I know. They still need more experience."
"A lot of it. Well Kairi, been nice seeing you again. Good luck on your team and goal."
-"Thanks Hayashi. It's a pleasure seeing you again too."


So, our next stop is Germany. There, I will finally have my taste of circuit racing. I'm so excited!


next on Red-Line - Chapter 16 : A Different Feeling Part I

don't miss it!!

 

[nd 4 holden spd]

W00t, another fun chapter. I LOL'ed when he said how cool his car would look airborn from a spectator's view, and then there was the picture.

 

[VTiRoj]

Nice win over the Rally Lancer!

Your EvoV needs a wash by the way.

 

[mcsqueegy]

Nice job! I wonder how old that Evo racer really was though...can't wait for Germany! 👍 Though may I ask: Are there any German tracks apart from the 'ring?

 

[Rotary Junkie]

Nice job! I wonder how old that Evo racer really was though...can't wait for Germany! 👍 Though may I ask: Are there any German tracks apart from the 'ring?

Nein.

Not in GT4 at least.

Nuerburgring Mullenbach, Sprint, and GP would make nice additions, but sadly, we don't get them.

Of course, that's still the 'Ring. Just not Nords.

 

[Smallhorses]

Another great chapter =drifting24/7= 👍
I like the no-nonsense style that your story has, a little preamble from the perspective of the racer to build up to the race, a good photo-story of the race event (which is important in the Race Reports forum!) and a neat paragraph or 2 afterwards.

It knocks spots off some of the other "racer-perspective" reports around here at the moment which seem to be more concerned with finicky details about "installing suspension components" and "how many turns it takes to put on a lugnut" than actual GT4 racing, which seems to have taken a spot on the backburners for other writers.

Keep up the good work!

 

[Skygrasper550]

W00t, another fun chapter. I LOL'ed when he said how cool his car would look airborn from a spectator's view, and then there was the picture.

a CP Evo always looks cool when airborne, cooler than a CT Evo..,

Nice win over the Rally Lancer!

Your EvoV needs a wash by the way.

^almost forgot to do that, i'll visit the GT Auto later.., 👍

Another great chapter =drifting24/7= 👍
I like the no-nonsense style that your story has, a little preamble from the perspective of the racer to build up to the race, a good photo-story of the race event (which is important in the Race Reports forum!) and a neat paragraph or 2 afterwards.

It knocks spots off some of the other "racer-perspective" reports around here at the moment which seem to be more concerned with finicky details about "installing suspension components" and "how many turns it takes to put on a lugnut" than actual GT4 racing, which seems to have taken a spot on the backburners for other writers.

Keep up the good work!

what can I say?? the pictures play the most important role in the race events 👍, and my story feels like it's a manga when you read it because of the pictures.., just reading a whole bunch of words is DULL, it's like reading a long novel IMO

i have one question though: what's a lugnut??

 

[DKX]

Great Chapter! can't wait to see the next one

 

[VTiRoj]

i have one question though: what's a lugnut??

The bolts that keep the wheels attached to the car.

 

[bergauk]

The bolts that keep the wheels attached to the car.

Don't you mean the nuts that attach to the bolt which attaches to the car while holding those spinning rubber/metal things which rub on the earth moving your car?

 

[nd 4 holden spd]

I hope =drifting24/7= is alright I haven't seen him in ages.

 

[bergauk]

School must've engulfed him, does he still post or anything?

 

[VTiRoj]

School must've engulfed him, does he still post or anything?

I second this. He did say how hard he was going to work so, I guess this is proof! We can always wait until he has a week off for some updates. 👍

 

[mustangGT90210]

He's become a true GTP mystery

 

[bergauk]

Well actually, we know where he is, and we know what he is doing. He's in school learning. He messaged a few of us. And pretty much explained that he is quite busy and when he has time he does play GT4 and saves tunes and replays for the story.

I do hope he comes back some time soon, I miss reading Red-Line.

 

[Skygrasper550]

pardon me for my sudden "leave", as some people know i have been quite busy these past few months because of college life. plus, this week is finals exam week, so only 1-2 hours left to play and then study, almost no time in front of the computer. but after this, the semester ends (thank God) and i WILL be back. hopefully i can release new drifters and the demonstration car for my garage, and finish this story of mine. I shall return. 👍

=d24/7=

 

[nd 4 holden spd]

Good luck in your exams d24/7 👍

 

[Parnelli Bone]

I'm looking forward to more RedLine, D24/7. YOu inspired many people with your style of story-telling (and pictures). Me included.

 

[Paulie]

I loved this story, I can't wait for more!

 

[Skygrasper550]

great news guys.., the semester has just just ended, and now I'm back!! i'm currently uploading pics for my story and garage, and working on Chapter 16.., hopefully i can post it up tomorrow, so stay tuned.., 👍

I'm looking forward to more RedLine, D24/7. YOu inspired many people with your style of story-telling (and pictures). Me included.

yes i know, all the more reason i'm determined to finish this.

I loved this story, I can't wait for more!

thanks for reading it, although it's been MONTHS since the last chapter was posted..,

 

[Skygrasper550]

Red-Line Chapter 16 : A Different Feeling Part 1​

Editor's Note: The bold text indicates the commentator for the race and the italicized text indicates radio communication. Enjoy reading!

So, our next stop is Germany. There, I will finally have my taste of circuit racing. I'm so excited!

I woke up, realizing I had fallen asleep on the plane, holding the picture Zinaida gave me. I got tired, but it was Kyosuke who raced back then in the Swiss Alps. I don't know, I'm just......tired.....Maybe because I'm thinking too much about her...*sigh* I hope she's okay...

"Tori?"
-"Uh...huh...hmmm, ah! What is it, Kairi-san?"
"Oh, were you sleeping? Sorry if I woke you up."
-"No, you didn't. I'm fine."
"If that's the case, we'll be landing shortly. The airport is about 10 minutes from where we are right now. We'll be in Germany soon, better check your things."
-"Hai, Kairi-san."

Germany...that's right, it will be the first time I will race on a real race track. I have to focus on that matter right now.

I headed to the cargo bay, to check on my Spoon Civic. I saw some dirt on the left door, so I wiped it with my handkerchief. Then I gave the roof a slight rub with my palm. "We've been throug a lot, eh? Tomorrow will be the first time we roll on a race course."

We finally got to Germany. After the plane landed, we hustled on checking everything and unloading the cars. After we got to the hotel (which was classy BTW), Kairi said, "You two should get enough rest, especially you, Tori. You're going to race on unfamiliar grounds."
"Hai, Kairi-san."
"Hai, Kairi-san."

Tomorrow came, and after eating breakfast we headed over to the said race course. The way I see it, everything looks brand new, even the patch of tarmac leading to the course itself. The spectator stands only had a handful of people, because again the course is new.

We headed over to the garages, there I saw all different kinds of tuned cars: Audi's, BMW's, Renault, Toyota's, Nissan's, Honda's and many more. After finding a spot for our cars and vans, Kyosuke and I decided to go check out the course.

"Wow, I've never seen a home straight this long."
-"Me neither. Even though the course is brand new, tire marks are already left on the starting grid."

"So Tori, how do you feel that you are now racing on a race course for the first time"
"Me? I don't know...nervous? Excited? Both? How about you, Kyosuke-san?"
-"Well I have to admit, I had some experience on circuit racing so it's not quite a big deal for me."
"Lucky for you, you already know how to study a race course."
-"Nah, don't sweat it. It'll be fine! You just have to find the perfect racing line and---"

"HEY YOU!!"

Just then we heard a loud voice. We couldn't help but look for the direction where it came from.

"YEAH YOU!"

It was a man, right next to a car.

"I'm talking to you, Skinny Face! What's your name?"
-"Me? I-I'm Tori."
"Name's Robert Blithe, call me R.B. for short. Are you the owner of that Civic over there??" He points at my car.

-"Uh yes, I am. Why did you ask?"
"Listen up, this here's a brand new Toyota Celica, my car. I have this baby tuned and customized, just look at the kickass body kit and vinyls!"

He revs up the engine.

It was the most DISGUSTING thing me and Kyosuke have ever heard from a car. Our ears were ringing. "Hear that? Like that sound, huh? That's from the muffler included in the engine tuning I've done, and I can tell you that Civic of yours is toast."

Just then Kairi called us. "I'm sorry, but we have to get back, we still have work to do on our own cars."
-"Go ahead, don't even bother messing around with your car, you'll lose anyway."

As we were walking back, Kyosuke whispered, "Say Tori, what was the name of that guy again?"
-"Uh, I think it was R.B., Robert Blithe, or something..,"
"R.B., huh? Sound like 'Ricer Boy' to me. Listen here, if you two end up on the same grid, show him no mercy."
-"I'll certainly do that. He humiliated my Civic, I'm gonna make him pay!"

While working on our cars, Kairi went to the registration office. When he came back...

"All right, I have signed you two up. Tori, you'll be the first to race. The officials are giving you 5 laps of practice around the course."
-"Hai."
"Oh, by the way, we have tuned your car again but don't worry, Yamato has adjusted the settings so it should be easier for you to drive your car. We've also placed a radio and camera inside your car so that you communicate with us whenever you have problems."
-"Arigato, Kairi-san."

Off I go, out of the pit lane and onto the race track.

~"Hello? Tori, can you hear me? It's me, Kairi. Is the radio working??"
"Yes, Kairi-san."
~"Good. We'll be watching your practice through the monitors over hear in the pit lane. Remember, study the course and know when to brake and step on the gas. We'll stop all communications for now so that you can concentrate."
"Hai."

"Whoa!"

"Aagh! This is tough!"

"These sudden ups and downs on the course are making me sick..."

"I have to focus, concentrate!"

(Tori zooms past the pit lane) "There goes our boy, Kairi. I have to admit, he's pretty fast down the straight."
-"How'd the tuning on the car go?"

"We've restored the car's power to 250hp, and we've fine-tuned the suspension so that Tori can tackle the course with ease."
-"So, all he needs is a proper racing line and he'll be doing fine. Don't worry Yamato, he'll find it."

"Hmm, so that's how to go around that corner. Is this what Kyosuke meant by finding the racing line? Study the course?"

"I see..."

"These rumble strips are killing my butt!! But Kairi said I should treat them as part of the course and maximize them. Seems like I have to get used to it. Oh well.."

*after a few laps* "I think I'm getting the hang of this course. Yosh, Time to go full out on the next lap and---"
~"All right Tori, that's a wrap. You already made 5 laps, come back now to the pits."

"Aww man, I lost track of how many laps I did! Just when I was about to.....*sigh*.....Hai, I'll head back now."

As I headed back to the pits and entered the garage, Kairi was waiting for me.

"So Tori, how'd the practice run go?"
-"I was about to go flat out but I lost track of how many laps I did."
"Is that so? Hmm, here's what you will do, since you ran out of time on your practice, just remember the racing line and you'll do fine on the race. Is that okay for you?"
-"I'll try, arigato Kairi-san."

Suddenly we noticed a sound. A car was zooming down the straight.

Yamato spoke, "A Honda S2000...that's a pretty fast car when tuned properly. Don't you agree, Kairi?"
-"I remember seeing one in a touge battle, its opponent was six seconds behind. That thing's a great machine."
"Yeah, let's just hope Tori and that S2000 won't be on the same grid."
-"No, you're wrong Yamato. Let's hope Tori and that S2000 WILL BE on the same grid."
"But that's insane! That car's superior than Tori's Spoon EK9! He won't stand a chance!"
-"That's the plan."
"*sigh* You know Kairi, sometimes I hate this personality of yours. You're too much of a risk-taker."


The time came and I was up for the next race. 2 laps, and the lineup was...

1st: AMUSE S2000 R1 '04

2nd: GRAN TURISMO SKYLINE GT-R (PC) '01

3rd: TRIAL Celica SS-II (ZZT231)

4th: Nissan 240RS Rally Car '85

5th: Opera Performance S2000 '04

6th (me): Spoon Civic Type R (EK) '00

I was getting nervous, can I do this? Overtake all 5 cars on 2 laps and win?? Race 9, begin!!

[POV Shift]

*"Okay folks, time to get back on your seats 'cause it's time for the next race and we got an exciting lineup! And it's go!!"
"All right, time to put that racing line to use. Ikkeee!!"

"So far, so good..."

"What?! No way! How can a FF rush on the outside and pass me??"

*"This is a surprise, the Honda Civic instantly overtook two cars! This is certainly something to watch!"
"!Huh?! That guy's fast!"

"Hehe, I wonder where that Skinny Face is. He probably understeered on that sharp right-hander and crashed..."

*looks at rear view mirror* "I-Impossible!! He overtook two cars already?!?!"

"How could he have caught up this fast?!"
"You'll pay for underestimating me and my Spoon Civic!"

"Hey, where'd he go?"

*"This is amazing! The Celica is going to be the Civic's next victim- on the straight!"
"N-No way! How can a low-torque Civic go side-by-side with my Celica on this straightaway?!"

"Grrr, I don't get this!!"

"He's fast!"

"Good. If I keep up this pace I'll win."

"Huh? Wait a sec, a minute ago that Civic---"

"--was on the back of the grid. Now it---"

"---just passed me???"

*"This is UN-believable! The Civic overtook 4 cars on a single lap! That driver's out of this world!"
"He's pretty darn quick!"

"Nothing can stop me and my S2000. This race is mine for the taking!"

"All right, 4 down..."

"...1 to go. Okay Tori, better be patient, he's the last one."

*"This race has just turned into a touge battle!"
"If I do anything rash, I'll blow it for sure."

"Was that the Civic I saw earlier? Don't tell me he passed all those guys behind me! This is not good..."

"Now!"
"Blast it! He's trying to pass me!"

"You're mine!"
"I will not lose to a mere FF!"

"Take...this!"
(shunt)
"Gaah! This guy's desperate!"

*"And the two cars are trading paint!"
"If that's the case, I will not lose either! Go Spoon Civic!"

"Yes, I have the lead!"
"Darn that driver and his Civic!"

"!The last corner! I'll regain my lead there! I know for sure FFs suck at cornering."

"He's fast! I can't catch up, it's not enough!"

*"The Honda Civic wins the race!!"
"All right, I won!!"
"...Impossible..."

[POV Shift]

I can't believe it. I won...in my first circuit race. I'm so proud of myself!!

"Way to go Tori! You da man!"
-"Ahaha, thanks Kyosuke-san."
"A job well done, Tori. You were amazing out there."
-"Arigato, Kairi-san!"


As we were celebrating, the driver of the orange S2000 approached us.

"Uh, I apologize back there, when I didn't give you room to pass me. You deserve to win, you're an amazing driver. Congratulations."
He offered a handshake. -"That's okay," We shook hands. "Thanks for the great race."

"My name's Albert Hicks. Let's race again sometime." then he left.

"Say Tori, where'd that R.B. guy go?" All of a sudden we saw him and his car leave the race track, as if he was in a hurry. -"Oh there he is."
"Hahaha! He must be so embarrased that you beat him and won the race!"
-"Yeah, that's what you get for humiliating my Civic!"

My race is over, now it's Kyosuke's turn. I can't wait to see him in action!


Next on Red-Line - Chapter 17 : Kyosuke's Time to Shine

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[VTiRoj]

YAY! He's back making chapters!

I have to say, that win was amazing. I know Deep Forest is a tricky track, especially with a FWD but somehow your Civic beat the Amuse S2000 there. Great stuff.

Tori still misses Zinaida? Bless the guy. He did great in racing though. Practice... looked a bit slippy out there.

The Pace Car actually racing seems odd, but you can't choose who you race so that's understandable. I only just noticed after seeing the images that the Amuse S2000's carbon fibre is much darker than the Spoon Civic's. Funny stuff with Robert too. The Celica doesnt sound that bad, though.

But yes, we want more and we want more now.

Quick note: You haven't closed all your tags.

 

[mafia_boy]

THANKYOU, finally............my red-line crack has arrived fresh from the Phillipines!! Great Chapter d24/7, always the highest standard of storywriting from you. 👍

 

[Smallhorses]

Another fantastic chapter =drifting24/7=! 👍
However, please take a quick look in this thread and make some more appropriate edits to your post.
Thanks.