Red-Line

Nice job besting a Celica on snow in a FWD with far too little weight...

How the heck did you keep up? Your version of the Spoon spins the tires through third... On pavement with S3s...
 
I have to admit, I doubted the Civic's abilities on snow (FWD on snow...), and boy was I wrong! :D

Great chapter! Looks like Tori won and got himself a date, the little smooth talker. :lol: Bless the guy, he spent half the chapter blushing! :P

Well worth the wait. :) Looking forward to more soon. ;)

Edit: N4HS: Bahahaha! That would be a good read...

"Tori, are you listening... hey!"
"Wait... I can hear something..."
"Tori?"
"There it is!" *Spoon Civic flies past*
"Oh god."
"Spooooooooo..."
"...."

:lol:
 
Yayyyy! Tori has taken a big leap for his social confidence. As usual, a great chapter, interesting at Chamonix too! That was well worth the wait, but don't torture us like that again :lol:.
 
(Deep breath) Awwwwwwwwwwww........................... (Deep Breath) Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww.:lol: Nice chapter, hope the next one isn't all about the date.:scared:

:lol::lol:

Nice job besting a Celica on snow in a FWD with far too little weight...

How the heck did you keep up? Your version of the Spoon spins the tires through third... On pavement with S3s...

you mean the TCv3 version?? I used a different setup in this race, the one i have is great for Chamonix.., 👍

I have to admit, I doubted the Civic's abilities on snow (FWD on snow...), and boy was I wrong! :D

when i took it out for Chamonix, the Spoon was very understeery at first, but i soon got the hang of it.., :) and would you believe, that replay i saved, that was my very first try on that course?? i thought i was going to lose back then.., :lol:

Great chapter! Looks like Tori won and got himself a date, the little smooth talker. :lol: Bless the guy, he spent half the chapter blushing! :P

Well worth the wait. :) Looking forward to more soon. ;)

Edit: N4HS: Bahahaha! That would be a good read...

"Tori, are you listening... hey!"
"Wait... I can hear something..."
"Tori?"
"There it is!" *Spoon Civic flies past*
"Oh god."
"Spooooooooo..."
"...."

:lol:

Who's the other guy Tori is talking to?

Yayyyy! Tori has taken a big leap for his social confidence. As usual, a great chapter, interesting at Chamonix too! That was well worth the wait, but don't torture us like that again :lol:.

i'll try not to :), again i apologize for the inconvenience..,
 
Edit: N4HS: Bahahaha! That would be a good read...

"Tori, are you listening... hey!"
"Wait... I can hear something..."
"Tori?"
"There it is!" *Spoon Civic flies past*
"Oh god."
"Spooooooooo..."
"...."

:lol:

:lol: :D Spooooooooooooooooooooooooo........*2nd date*........oooooooooooon!

:lol::lol:



Who's the other guy Tori is talking to?



i'll try not to :), again i apologize for the inconvenience..,

The other "guy" is his date.:sly: We're joking that even on his date with this apparently lovely lady, he gets side tracted by a Spoon Civic and goes chasing it.:lol:

Stop apologising already, :sly: Tell us to get bent and wait until you're ready to publish a new chapter.:lol:
 
:lol: :D Spooooooooooooooooooooooooo........*2nd date*........oooooooooooon!



The other "guy" is his date.:sly: We're joking that even on his date with this apparently lovely lady, he gets side tracted by a Spoon Civic and goes chasing it.:lol:

:lol::lol::lol: you mean Zinaida.., but, he already has his own Spoon Civic, :lol::lol:

Stop apologising already, :sly: Tell us to get bent and wait until you're ready to publish a new chapter.:lol:

all right, all right.., i'll work on the next chapter as soon as i have free time.., :D
 
Definately worth the wait. But now, how can you include a race and a date in 1 chapter...?

*CoughSEATLE!cough*
 
I'm a fan of Initial D since 2004 and Wangan Midnight since 2006.

I can officially say that I'm actually enjoying this story... Keep up the good work. :)
 
I'm a fan of Initial D since 2004 and Wangan Midnight since 2006.

I can officially say that I'm actually enjoying this story... Keep up the good work. :)

thanks for the comments, all of you guys.., even though i'm very busy right now, i'll try to write Red-Line on my free time.., i'm just having a few problems with Chapter 14, i think that chapter is going to be just about the date, i don't know :P

right now, Tori and Team MUGEN are currently on a European Campaign, but after Europe, next stop is America.., :)
 
I don't know whats worse: The next chapter just being about the date, or during the date, a Spoon Civic flying past the road...maybe they'd both chase it?? :lol:. Though I still wish there were Australian tracks in GT4... i'm not the only one who'd say that :indiff:.
 
I don't know whats worse: The next chapter just being about the date, or during the date, a Spoon Civic flying past the road...maybe they'd both chase it?? :lol:. Though I still wish there were Australian tracks in GT4... i'm not the only one who'd say that :indiff:.

No, you're right, you're not. Pretty much all GTP says that. Australia needs at least one track to have some represenation and a "home" course of sorts for our cars. Even if it was a fictional course. No one's saying they should go crazy and put in a full V8 Supercar roster, but you know, something would be nice.
 
I don't know whats worse: The next chapter just being about the date, or during the date, a Spoon Civic flying past the road...maybe they'd both chase it?? :lol:. Though I still wish there were Australian tracks in GT4... i'm not the only one who'd say that :indiff:.

No, you're right, you're not. Pretty much all GTP says that. Australia needs at least one track to have some represenation and a "home" course of sorts for our cars. Even if it was a fictional course. No one's saying they should go crazy and put in a full V8 Supercar roster, but you know, something would be nice.

if they ARE going to add Australian tracks in GT5, let it be Melbourne GP Circuit and a city course.., :)👍
 
The Melbourne GP circuit (Albert Park) is great, I went there last year, and there's a sports/aquatic center virtually inside it! Though there aren't any real city courses...but theres always Mount Panorama, right Holdenboy? :)
 
I absolutely hate the Melb GP circuit...blocking up all the roads is pretty annoying. Mount Panorama would be nice though :).

Still waiting for next chapter, can't wait :P.
 
if they ARE going to add Australian tracks in GT5, let it be Melbourne GP Circuit and a city course.., :)👍

IF there was Australian track in GT5, it should be Bathurst. I swear to you this track makes Nurburgring look tame, and is rated as one of the Top 3 tracks in the world. It also has a history extending over 50yrs in Australia that is more rich and more passionate than any track in America or Japan could ever hope to rival.;)

The Melbourne GP circuit (Albert Park) is great, I went there last year, and there's a sports/aquatic center virtually inside it! Though there aren't any real city courses...but theres always Mount Panorama, right Holdenboy? :)

RIGHT! Bathurst is really the only option.:sly:
 
Bathurst is a murderer...

I love it though. Did a GTL race there, at night. I was in a Porsche 906 and I lost my headlights on around the 4th or 5th lap. Very fun, very challenging track.
 
just got me a boatload of homework this week, maybe it will take a while for me to finish the next chapter, but yes I have started it.., next place is the sunny beach of Tahiti.., please correct me if I'm wrong, but is Tahiti in France?? or anywhere near France?? thanks.., :)
 
It's one of the major islands of French Polynesia, between Australia and South America.

On this map, look on the left side, directly west of Bolivia/Peru.
 
Red-Line Chapter 14 : Zinaida


I can't believe it......she, no, Zinaida......asked me to go out with her........This is a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity!! I can't wait!


We were on our way back to the hotel, and until now I can't keep from smiling because Zinaida asked me out for a date. I'm so excited!

"Kagiyama-san!"
-"Yes Kyosuke, what is it?"
"You won't believe it, Tori won in a snow race!"
-"Really?"
"Yes! He beat the local that is an unsuspected racer, it was a girl!"
-"A girl, you say? Hmm...Tori-san, what is the name of the girl who you just raced against?"
"She's Zinaida, Zinaida Kalina."
-"Did you say 'Kalina'?"
"Hai. Why, what is it, Kagiyama-san?"
-"Hmmm.....Kyosuke, I'm going out. I'll have Yamato take care of things around here. I'll borrow your Evo for a while, I need to go somwhere."
"Yes, Kagiyama-san."

Kairi left like he was in a hurry. Me and Kyosuke were a bit puzzled, "Kyosuke-san, why did Kagiyama-san left in such a hurry??"
-"Beats me. Maybe he remembered someone when you mentioned Zinaida's name. I dunno...."
"Oh, ok... Oh no, i forgot to tell Kagiyama-san about my 'plans' for tomorrow."
-"Your 'plans', eh? Hehe, you can tell him later."


*meanwhile, Kairi went to a small house in the not-so-far side of town.*

"Frank!"
-"Kairi, is that you??"
"Yes, it's me. Long time no see."
-"Long time no see, too. Come inside."
"Where's your daughter?"
-"She went out, said she was going to race with someone."
"Heh, so...you already taught your little girl how to race at a young age."
-"Of course. A racer has to pass on his skills to the next generation, right? Haha!"

Just then, a white car stopped in front of the house.


*later that evening*

Kairi was back. I didn't tell him right away my "plans", because I think he needs some rest. I waited for not more than one hour.

"Uhm, Kagiyama-san..."
-"Yes, what is it, Tori?"
"...uhm.....I was thinking.......I want to ask permission.....to go out tomorrow.....with somebody........"
-"Is it a girl?"

!!WHAT THE?! How'd he knew?!?!

"Uhm......yes......"
-"Take care. With those snow tires you won't have problems navigating the snow roads."
"Hai! Arigato gozaimasu, Kagiyama-san!"

Wow, that was quick. But now that I have Kairi's permission, I'm good to go! Man, I can't wait!


*the next day*

I headed to the place where we decided to meet, that place where we first met.

TakeADrive.jpg


I saw her, waiting. I quickly pulled over to the side of the road.

"Zinaida! Have you been waiting here for a while?"
-"No, I just got here. I asked my dad to drop me off here, he was going somewhere."
"I see. So, shall we....uh...get going??"
-"Yes, let's go!" She smiled.

So, off we went. She sat in the passenger seat, I glanced at her as she sat. Man is she beautiful! Her skin is white and smooth, her clothes are cute today, it's as if she wore them just for this occasion. I'm getting nervous!

First stop, the coffee shop. It was a bit colder than usual today, so she wanted to get something to warm her up. I got her a cup of hot chocolate, I got one for me too.

"Uhm, Tori... it's a bit crowded in here, do you want to go someplace else?"
-"Sure, where do you want to go?"
"Let's see...the park should be a nice place. Let's have our hot chocolate there."
-"Okay, that's a great idea!"

So, off to the park we went. As we parked, we looked for an empty bench to sit. Luckily, we saw a couple leave on a bench near the port. "Let's sit there," I said.

"Say, Tori..."
-"What is it?"
"About the race yesterday...I was really surprised and impressed at you. (she looks at her cup of hot choco) My father was a racer, he taught me how to drive and to navigate that snow course since I was 15, and since I don't have much interests and hobbies back then it was okay for me. As I continued driving, I got hooked. I began to appreciate cars in that way, and eventually, like them. I got faster and faster every day, my father honed my skills without me even knowing that his real intention was to make me a race driver. (she holds her cup a bit tighter) After just 2 years, I learned a lot. Since then, a few racers have challenged and tried to best me, but all failed."

"I have found no one to beat me, that is, until yesterday. (she looks at me) You're a great driver, Tori. You really are."
-"Really?? Me?? Well, hehe, i..........don't know what to say......"
"(chuckles)"

After drinking the hot chocolate, we ate at a nearby restaurant at the park. As I was eating, I keep glancing on her, then I carelessly spilled a little food on my shirt. She noticed it, "Let me wipe that for you." As she got closer to me, I can smell the scent of her hair and feel the warmth coming from her body. Damn this feeling!! Then, we decided to call it a day. She told me that I should drop her off at the "meeting place". While on our way, she opened up a conversation.

"Uhm....Tori...."
-"What is it?"
"This car......the car you're driving.....I remember my father used to tell me his experiences when he was still racing. He seldom mentions about a racer who drives a car exactly the same as yours, yes, this yellow Honda I'm talking about. He told me how great the driver was, they were always competing at each other every race, because of that they developed a friendly rivalry. He always smiles when he tells those things to me. He must have enjoyed his years of racing back then. I'm happy for him."

-"I see. Well, this car ain't that much, but it's still a great car! Haha!"

"Yeah, hehe....hmm, as far as I can remember, that driver Father was talking about was, i think he was Japanese, same as you. I forgot his name, i think it was K---"
-"Oh, we're here."
"Well, this is it. You're leaving tomorrow, are you?"
-"Yeah, we still have to pursue our goal, to be the best."
"I wish the best of luck to you and your team. Take care!"

As I dropped her off, I left. Man, I enjoyed today, the smile on my face just won't go away!

*the next day*

We were preparing our stuff for our next destination, we are to leave by 10 a.m. sharp. Everyone was in a hurry, final checks were made when we got to the airport.

"Do you everything ready? Kyosuke? Tori?"
"Hai, Kagiyama-san."
"Hai, Kagiyama-san."

Suddenly, I heard someone shout, "Tori!!"

I looked back, I was surprised it was Zinaida!

"Tori!!"
-"??Zinaida!"
"*catches breath* So, you're leaving now.."
-"Yes..."
"I.......I want to give you something. Here, it's a picture of me and my Celica. I want you to have it." (she hands me the photo)
-"Uh, thanks! Here, I have something to give to you too. It's a picture of me and my Civic, well we could say we exchanged pictures, haha!"
"Hehe.........uhm.....Tori....."
-"What is it?"
"Take care......(she whispers me) I love you," the she kisses me in the cheek.

Time froze for me. She said the three magic words. SHE. KISSED. ME. I just wanted to faint, huuuuuh......

As we flew off, I can't stop thinking about her. She must be feeling the same, too. This warm feeling, I daydreamed as we got to our next destination: Switzerland. As the plane was about to land, I can see the mountains afar. I was amazed, "Woooooow..."

TheSwissAlps.jpg


The alps were breath-taking. I wonder what challenges awaits us here....


next on Red-Line - Chapter 15 : The Dogfight at the Alps

don't miss it!!
 
Hmmm, is this a hint at Tori getting some hot... chocolate... later in the story? :lol:

Nice chapter, nice to take a break from racing once in a while eh? :P
 
Now, if this Zinaida character I'm suddenly having a strange liking to as I'm reading this looks a lot like Leighton Meester from the CW's Gossip Girl, I can totally understand. :D

Keep up the good work, as always. I'm liking this story so far.
 
Dude I love how you're now becoming a rally racer!

Ahh teenage love. He better go back for her!
 
Uh-oh... let's hope Tori doesn't have an emotional breakdown before the next race, he might miss her too much... it was a nice kind of 'in between' chapter though, you need to hear more than the racing :lol:. Great job!
 
+1 to what everyone has already said, and awesome work again on the new chapter. What happens if Tori goes back for her and finds she has a picture of a guy with his Skyline?:lol:
 
I think you meant to say "can't stop smiling". ;)

Otherwise, great chapter! :D

no, Tori can't keep from smiling, he's trying to hide his smile and happiness but he can't.., 👍

Now, if this Zinaida character I'm suddenly having a strange liking to as I'm reading this looks a lot like Leighton Meester from the CW's Gossip Girl, I can totally understand. :D

Keep up the good work, as always. I'm liking this story so far.

uh, what's CW??

Dude I love how you're now becoming a rally racer!

Ahh teenage love. He better go back for her!

thanks...man, my mind is busting with ideas for the next chapters of Red-Line, i can't wait to put them down!

+1 to what everyone has already said, and awesome work again on the new chapter. What happens if Tori goes back for her and finds she has a picture of a guy with his Skyline?:lol:

that's not gonna happen.., :D

Red-Line Chapter 14 : Zinaida


I can't believe it......she, no, Zinaida......asked me to go out with her........This is a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity!! I can't wait!


We were on our way back to the hotel, and until now I can't keep smiling because Zinaida asked me out for a date. I'm so excited!

"Kagiyama-san!"
-"Yes Kyosuke, what is it?"
"You won't believe it, Tori won in a snow race!"
-"Really?"
"Yes! He beat the local that is an unsuspected racer, it was a girl!"
-"A girl, you say? Hmm...Tori-san, what is the name of the girl who you just raced against?"
"She's Zinaida, Zinaida Kalina."
-"Did you say 'Kalina'?"
"Hai. Why, what is it, Kagiyama-san?"
-"Hmmm.....Kyosuke, I'm going out. I'll have Yamato take care of things around here. I'll borrow your Evo for a while, I need to go somwhere."
"Yes, Kagiyama-san."

Kairi left like he was in a hurry. Me and Kyosuke were a bit puzzled, "Kyosuke-san, why did Kagiyama-san left in such a hurry??"
-"Beats me. Maybe he remembered someone when you mentioned Zinaida's name. I dunno...."
"Oh, ok... Oh no, i forgot to tell Kagiyama-san about my 'plans' for tomorrow."
-"Your 'plans', eh? Hehe, you can tell him later."


*meanwhile, Kairi went to a small house in the not-so-far side of town.*

"Frank!"
-"Kairi, is that you??"
"Yes, it's me. Long time no see."
-"Long time no see, too. Come inside."
"Where's your daughter?"
-"She went out, said she was going to race with someone."
"Heh, so...you already taught your little girl how to race at a young age."
-"Of course. A racer has to pass on his skills to the next generation, right? Haha!"

Just then, a white car stopped in front of the house.


*later that evening*

Kairi was back. I didn't tell him right away my "plans", because I think he needs some rest. I waited for not more than one hour.

"Uhm, Kagiyama-san..."
-"Yes, what is it, Tori?"
"...uhm.....I was thinking.......I want to ask permission.....to go out tomorrow.....with somebody........"
-"Is it a girl?"

!!WHAT THE?! How'd he knew?!?!

"Uhm......yes......"
-"Take care. With those snow tires you won't have problems navigating the snow roads."
"Hai! Arigato gozaimasu, Kagiyama-san!"

Wow, that was quick. But now that I have Kairi's permission, I'm good to go! Man, I can't wait!


*the next day*

I headed to the place where we decided to meet, that place where we first met.

TakeADrive.jpg


I saw her, waiting. I quickly pulled over to the side of the road.

"Zinaida! Have you been waiting here for a while?"
-"No, I just got here. I asked my dad to drop me off here, he was going somewhere."
"I see. So, shall we....uh...get going??"
-"Yes, let's go!" She smiled.

So, off we went. She sat in the passenger seat, I glanced at her as she sat. Man is she beautiful! Her skin is white and smooth, her clothes are cute today, it's as if she wore them just for this occasion. I'm getting nervous!

First stop, the coffee shop. It was a bit colder than usual today, so she wanted to get something to warm her up. I got her a cup of hot chocolate, I got one for me too.

"Uhm, Tori... it's a bit crowded in here, do you want to go someplace else?"
-"Sure, where do you want to go?"
"Let's see...the park should be a nice place. Let's have our hot chocolate there."
-"Okay, that's a great idea!"

So, off to the park we went. As we parked, we looked for an empty bench to sit. Luckily, we saw a couple leave on a bench near the port. "Let's sit there," I said.

"Say, Tori..."
-"What is it?"
"About the race yesterday...I was really surprised and impressed at you. (she looks at her cup of hot choco) My father was a racer, he taught me how to drive and to navigate that snow course since I was 15, and since I don't have much interests and hobbies back then it was okay for me. As I continued driving, I got hooked. I began to appreciate cars in that way, and eventually, like them. I got faster and faster every day, my father honed my skills without me even knowing that his real intention was to make me a race driver. (she holds her cup a bit tighter) After just 2 years, I learned a lot. Since then, a few racers have challenged and tried to best me, but all failed."

"I have found no one to beat me, that is, until yesterday. (she looks at me) You're a great driver, Tori. You really are."
-"Really?? Me?? Well, hehe, i..........don't know what to say......"
"(chuckles)"

After drinking the hot chocolate, we ate at a nearby restaurant at the park. Then, we decided to call it a day. She told me that I should drop her off at the "meeting place". While on our way, she opened up a conversation.

"Uhm....Tori...."
-"What is it?"
"This car......the car you're driving.....I remember my father used to tell me his experiences when he was still racing. He seldom mentions about a racer who drives a car exactly the same as yours, yes, this yellow Honda I'm talking about. He told me how great the driver was, they were always competing at each other every race, because of that they developed a friendly rivalry. He always smiles when he tells those things to me. He must have enjoyed his years of racing back then. I'm happy for him."

-"I see. Well, this car ain't that much, but it's still a great car! Haha!"

"Yeah, hehe....hmm, as far as I can remember, that driver Father was talking about was, i think he was Japanese, same as you. I forgot his name, i think it was K---"
-"Oh, we're here."
"Well, this is it. You're leaving tomorrow, are you?"
-"Yeah, we still have to pursue our goal, to be the best."
"I wish the best of luck to you and your team. Take care!"

As I dropped her off, I left. Man, I enjoyed today, the smile on my face just won't go away!

*the next day*

We were preparing our stuff for our next destination, we are to leave by 10 a.m. sharp. Everyone was in a hurry, final checks were made when we got to the airport.

"Do you everything ready? Kyosuke? Tori?"
"Hai, Kagiyama-san."
"Hai, Kagiyama-san."

Suddenly, I heard someone shout, "Tori!!"

I looked back, I was surprised it was Zinaida!

"Tori, *catches breath* so, you're leaving now.."
-"Yes."
"I.....I want to give you something. Here, it's a picture of me and my Celica. I want you to have it." (she hands me the photo)
-"Uh, thanks! Here, I have something to give to you too. It's a picture of me and my Civic, well we could say we exchanged pictures, haha!"
"Hehe.........uhm.....Tori....."
-"What is it?"
"Take care......(she whispers me) I love you," the she kisses me in the cheek.

Time froze for me. She said the three magic words. SHE. KISSED. ME. I just wanted to faint, huuuuuh......

As we flew off, I can't stop thinking about her. She must be feeling the same, too. This warm feeling, I daydreamed as we got to our next destination: Sweden. As the plane was about to land, I can see the mountains afar. I was amazed, "Woooooow..."

TheSwissAlps.jpg


The alps were breath-taking. I wonder what challenges awaits us here....


next on Red-Line - Chapter 15 : The Dogfight at the Alps

don't miss it!!


now, in case no one has noticed, the next race is to be in the Swiss Alps. that is supposed to be in Switzerland, but i typed there "Sweden".., how stupid :banghead::banghead: i'm surprised no one has noticed!

@ VTiRoj - what do you mean by "Tori getting some hot....chocolate.....later in the story" ?? :confused:

*edit - Chapter 14 is edited, I decided to lengthen the part on the restaurant and replaced "Sweden" with Switzerland.., :)
 
no, Tori can't keep from smiling, he's trying to hide his smile and happiness but he can't.., 👍

But you typed that he can't keep smiling. No "from" about it. ;)

uh, what's CW??

A U.S television station.

that's not gonna happen.., :D
Nope, it'll be an American by the name of John. No Skyline I'm afraid.



now, in case no one has noticed, the next race is to be in the Swiss Alps. that is supposed to be in Switzerland, but i typed there "Sweden".., how stupid :banghead::banghead: i'm surprised no one has noticed!

We all make mistakes.

@ VTiRoj - what do you mean by "Tori getting some hot....chocolate.....later in the story" ?? :confused:

Ever had a girlfriend in Grand Theft Auto: San Andreas? You know when she asks you in for coffee? Yeah, it's like that. ;)

*edit - Chapter 14 is edited, I decided to lengthen the part on the restaurant and replaced "Sweden" with Switzerland.., :)

Will read.
 
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