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His Lie.

Theres something he has not told you,
He made the world after a second week,
But yet he lied to everyone except a few,
That "few" included me, because i've realised the future is bleak.

What he told has not surprised me,
But will probably shock many,
It is extrordinary,
That so many people have believed a phony.

On the eigth,
He created jelousey,
Man envied the faith,
That was spent on someone with controversy.

On day nine,
He created races,
Beings would be given a fine,
Of unhappiness for the colour of their faces.

Number ten soon came upon,
He created war,
Men fight for terrortories sometimes just for fun,
Yet the women and children became ever more poor.

Eleven,
He created corruption,
The rich brought their place in heaven,
Whilst the poor were given no affection.

Twelth day arose,
He created disease,
We would suffer an early close,
Without any ease.

Thirteenth day, unlucky to some,
He tied everything up with pain and suffer,
Hits us like a drum,
But yet thats all he had to offer.

Finally the fourteenth day,
He took another day of rest,
Happy with the work he's done he waits for pay,
And starts to think of his next quest.

Religion is his lie,
Athiests are his enemy,
But no matter how hard he may try,
He wont convert me.
 
someone posted a version of that before but i had to post the version i heard before.

and what, are you trying so hard to not forget my name you must quote it? lol
 
its in my profile...

i was just trying to write something but decided it was utter crap. something about a hero that commited suicide. it started ok but i couldnt get past two stanzas and it just didnt make sense.
 
Justin
i was just trying to write something but decided it was utter crap. something about a hero that commited suicide. it started ok but i couldnt get past two stanzas and it just didnt make sense.

Well don't give it up mate, i'm sure it will come to you soon. 👍
 
Path

By myself but not alone...
These voices talking...
So I keep on walking...

along this path of nothingness
where I'm going do you know?
I ask for I've no clue...

Down this path I go...
Where will I end up?
no one knows...

as they march along clutching their crucifix...
none will know when I've gone...
My rotting corpes will sing them along...


Will there be roses by my stone?
Alas the cold has set the tone...
chilling to the bone...

the skys full of gloom...
on we go to our doom...
I wont even have a tomb...

all there is to say...
its been a long ride...
but now here I lay...
full of room for you to play...
 
Here is one from me

My Day

Morning comes, I wake,
But I sho' don't eat no pancakes,
When I get going, I truly rush,
Now I have some teeth to brush!

I still get to school on time,
Here too I can't whine,
Everyone takes my pencils that I lend,
So I can't wait much longer for day to end!

I do my work and then I play,
Next I watch TV the rest of the day,
I go to bed since it's ten,
Now I sleep dreading that crappy day again!
 
kyle
Here is one from me

My Day

Morning comes, I wake,
But I sho' don't eat no pancakes,
When I get going, I truly rush,
Now I have some teeth to brush!

I still get to school on time,
Here too I can't whine,
Everyone takes my pencils that I lend,
So I can't wait much longer for day to end!

I do my work and then I play,
Next I watch TV the rest of the day,
I go to bed since it's ten,
Now I sleep dreading that crappy day again!

For your first one thats a pretty decent poem, but perhaps you might need to work on your ryhming just a little. Like I said though, good effort. 👍

Justin: Thats great!
👍👍
 
THE ED3
thats nice bee.

If i had the wings of an angel, and the ass of a big buffalo... i'd fly to the top of creation, and crap on the people below!


nonono.

If i had the wings of an eagle.
And the bloody great ar*e of a crow.
Id fly over Anfield tomorrow.
And **** on the bast*rds below.
 
GT_Fan2005
nonono.

If i had the wings of an eagle.
And the bloody great ar*e of a crow.
Id fly over Anfield tomorrow.
And **** on the bast*rds below.

:grumpy: Someone wants a slap.... :lol:
 
With Raven words she sings to me,
With Blackbird plumes she shares,
With eyes of a Loveshot Crow she sees,
And I know that she dares.

To my abode we saunter,
And soar above the pack,
Today my heart was rendered weak,
Shot down on wings of black.
 
my Tenth, Hopeless Soul

"I have mixed emotions, I feel like I'm in the ocean, I have no control of the motion. I'm conflicting my feelings of loneliness and Hopelessness, I can't escape the remerging Darkness, I can't get away from the reoccuring Madness. I'm feeling like I slowly Decaying away, with little or nothing to say. this is my life as it constintly rolls, I'm just another "Hopeless Soul"
 
RACECAR
my Tenth, Hopeless Soul

"I have mixed emotions, I feel like I'm in the ocean, I have no control of the motion. I'm conflicting my feelings of loneliness and Hopelessness, I can't escape the remerging Darkness, I can't get away from the reoccuring Madness. I'm feeling like I slowly Decaying away, with little or nothing to say. this is my life as it constintly rolls, I'm just another "Hopeless Soul"

Nice 👍
 
Some great poems there guys, I'll have to dig out some of my poems that are on poetry.com. I think of poetry being a snapshot of my emotions given a particular time andthe best way to portrey them is to utilize free verse poetry (IMO of course) that way I'm not battling with making it 'pretty' an just spewing my guts all over the table for all to "enjoy" LOL. Late'

Jerome
 
Virus

My present to you,
It attacks with no alarm,
And it will continue,
To make the calm.

Before the storm,
Its tricks you into exspendance,
On corrupt forces "trying" to bring you back to norm.
You wont even feel its existance.

Time nears towards the attack,
Your too suseptable to the poison,
It will start to make you crack,
Under the release of the conclusion.

That you are infected,
With my virus,
It feeds on being you, being unrestricted,
And all your fuss.

I expect your plea,
For my help to heal,
Im still waiting, don't expect a money fee,
I just want you to feel,

My virus, my love.
 
Bee
Virus

My present to you,
It attacks with no alarm,
And it will continue,
To make the calm.

Before the storm,
Its tricks you into exspendance,
On corrupt forces "trying" to bring you back to norm.
You wont even feel its existance.

Time nears towards the attack,
Your too suseptable to the poison,
It will start to make you crack,
Under the release of the conclusion.

Thats you are infected,
With my virus,
It feeds on being you being unrestricted,
And all your fuss.

I expect your plea,
For my help to heal,
Im still waiting, don't expect a money fee,
I just want you to feel,

My virus, my love.
thanks for the compliment. yours is cool too 👍
 
Limit.

I'm at my end,
My limit as such,
My demons contend,
To see who strikes the final touch.

I rise away,
From my tear flooded pillow,
I post-poned it another day,
Soon though I shall meet god and say "Hello".

I remember I made a promise,
To myself,
That one day I shall dismiss,
My own health.

But something drives me,
Inspires me to cope,
It's as strong as an oak tree,
Yet as delecate as a hope.

It's not physical,
But mental,
An emontional,
Freefall.

Alas sooner or later that freefall ends,
And with a bang,
My life shall not extend,
But instead the final bell would be rang.

Yet this invisible forces continues,
To hold me up against my will,
No matter how hard I fight against you,
With hope you refill.

You know who you are,
And I say thank you,
I will never be far,
If my debt is due.

(To a very very special friend of mine, this was written straight after the tribute to the soldiers and I thought I would not release it untill after the person has read it.)
 
Someone needs to get off their duff and write something... Prove that I'm not the best thing this thread has going... That would really suck if it is as my works are always rather crappy...


It cant rain forever...

last night I had a dream you came to me...

My tears falling like shards of glass
from a shattered window pain...
It cant rain forever you say to me...
The pain I've held in side so long...
Soon to be set free...

Oh how I miss thee...
So young were we...
You were in love with me and I with thee...
Two lovebirds aching to be set free...

Yet what happened was not supposed to be...
Together forever we were to be...
You with me and I with thee...
Our emotions ment to run with glee...

Yet you were takin from me...
My heart broken like a rusty part...
That bastard fate ripped us appart...
Like a child with twigs fallen in the park...

Oh how it feels like the sky will never stop falling...
Every night I'm sure I hear you calling...
Yet my hopes are always pinned on nothing more
then a wisper upon the wind...

Oh what I wouldnt do...
To simply sit next to you...
One day it shall be true...
In our hands we will hold eachother...
Maybe you will even be a mother...

My tears wont fall forever...
From dusk till dawn I will wait for you...


Death will not keep you from me...
 
Dont get your knickers in a bunch over this one Bee...


My Lord

In my life
I was always someone
no one ever cared about...
Always deep in my darkest hour...
Thought there was nothing left to lose...
Only one thing left to chose...
Finger on the trigger gonna pull it...
You show me that I can take it...
When life gets bleak
You show me that I can make it...
When life gets rough
There is no need for me to fake it...
When life gets me down...
There is no need for me to forsake it...
You set me free...

I was once a sinner...
The type of guy you wouldnt have over for dinner...
But with you now I feel like a winner...

When all I see is black and grey...
You give me a blue sky to set me free...
When I'm stuck in a corner...
You knock down all the walls around me...
When the path is hidden from me...
You let me see...

Thanks for always being there with me.
You have set me free.
 
Some good work in here. I'll contribute something, its not much, just something I wrote for my friend one night when we were trippin out...

The Rabbit

In a tall dark wood, A lone Rabbit stood, Waiting for the presence of time,
As the white water waved, A nickel was saved, And school kids chanted their rhyme,
"Snort the salt up, Mad volcanos erupt, So bury your children tonight.",
"Now go choose your God.", they said with a nod, "Cause the Rabbit is out tonight."
 
My eleventh, "Purpose"

what am I here for, I feel so ignored, Feels like no one will answer the Question I've asked time and time before. am I not to know, just to go, just to cast about blindly before I explode? is the knowledge I seek of no need, will they continue to ignor me, will I not to know of the truth I perceived, or have I been merely deceived? I question my existance, whether my life is even relavent, or if its even needed, or if it will soon be depleted. its always an unanswered question, and daily my patience keeps wearing thin. this life is almost of no use if I have to keep suffering this abuse. how envitible it is that it keeps going like this, so I hate and I lay in the emptiness. I will continue to carry the burden of this, the question that is forever inside me, what is my "purpose?"
 
CRADLE of SIN
have you seen this new stuff Bee?

Yep I have, very good quality from everyone. 👍

Pioneers

With this first step the world changes for eternity,
History will not read the same,
My riches will be greater than infinity,
And I will feed on my new found fame.

But what about their homeland?
You dare question,
I don't care about their pity band,
I'm here to make an end to our condition!

But what about their lives?!
How rediculous are you,
The life of them will be ended by my knives,
Maybe I shall spare a few?

No, this land must be converted,
To serve the motherland,
Its power over the world will be extended,
But I don't want to make it bland.

For I am a pioneer!
And I live to change their system,
I have no fear,
And not a care for them.

And now we walk on,
Over this alien land,
Yes it will be fun,
Watching their bodies fall into the sand....
 
Many more to come god willing. 👍


DIE DIE DIE


Your life is full of pain
you wanna go insane...

Those around you pound you...
They all hound you...
Run and hide
But still you they find...

Always lost in your mind
Looking for your own kind

But in the end
You are back where your jorney began
Lost and alone searching for what is nothing...

The solution is simple you say...
Let them do what they may...
Their day commeth near...
Soon it shall be here...

They have the world to fear
For it comes closer as you near...

By night death comes ripping...
The trees growing restless as dawn rushs here...
Blood spilled from there to here...
Bodys laying here to there...


Today shall be a good day...
No one to get in your way...
Wonder if they'll miss your Daddy at work today...


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Malice


The darkend skies...
Memorys of days passed by...
A whirlwind of emotions...
Sanity caught up in a flutter...
The words you scream
All in a mutter...
All on this day
The day that you shall die...

The meaning of life...
Misplaced by carefullness...
Hidden in plain sight...
The best place to loose yourself tonight...

I am a zealot to the worthless.
The general principle misguided...
Shown a universal truth...
Life is an irritatiing failure...
Doom is to be true...

Beautifull visions of insisions
Bleeding humanity dry
Just for a slight delight...

The perfection of a morality
Replaced by a generic theory
Of our irrelevant rationality...

Caught up in a moment of permanent ignorance...
The puzzle is broken....

Human kind is asinie.
 
Magician

Mother of creation full of malignity...
Perverting virtue, enslaving grace...
From the ominous inception,
To the immaculate conception...
Ecstasy found in universal sorrow...
Feelings of a shrewd satisfaction with sarcastic sentiments
shown for all humanity...
Farcical hatred and ghastly pleasure the anthems of the day...
The wage of our sin may be death...
But the wage of our ignorance is this life of cruelty...
Oh how naive are the righteous...
Their childlike bliss a flagrant error of morality...
Beguiled into an absurd life of vile misery...


This life, a requisite hallucination...
Nothing more then a clever parody...
All untill the day humanity withers away...
 
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