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Vulcan mind meld!
Edit: Bow chicka wow wow.
(I'm so horrible)
Edit 2: Oh lawd, The Sun is Tired is up. Sorry Ciroton. Your Trixie story will have to wait.
Edit 3: Okay, I just finished A Little Piece of Heaven. I think that the ending for it was rather... it was rather blunt. The scene before the ending was fine, but the final scene just sorta happened. And I know you mentioned it would be resolved in a future story, but I can't help but feel somewhat empty for not getting closure for what happened with Velvet. I will say in hindsight that the chapter ultimately went well clear of anything featured in Of Mares and Magic, and it ended on a believably high note considering what happened. The scene at the funeral in particular was quite powerful.
The next bit is spoilered because after I wrote it I realized that it isn't really a criticism of A Little Piece of Heaven so much as a specific element of it.
Edit: Bow chicka wow wow.
(I'm so horrible)
Edit 2: Oh lawd, The Sun is Tired is up. Sorry Ciroton. Your Trixie story will have to wait.
Edit 3: Okay, I just finished A Little Piece of Heaven. I think that the ending for it was rather... it was rather blunt. The scene before the ending was fine, but the final scene just sorta happened. And I know you mentioned it would be resolved in a future story, but I can't help but feel somewhat empty for not getting closure for what happened with Velvet. I will say in hindsight that the chapter ultimately went well clear of anything featured in Of Mares and Magic, and it ended on a believably high note considering what happened. The scene at the funeral in particular was quite powerful.
The next bit is spoilered because after I wrote it I realized that it isn't really a criticism of A Little Piece of Heaven so much as a specific element of it.
Also, Trixie Pie is still weird. I admit that you made it work for this, but I almost feel that it worked purely because of these specific circumstances. Now, even as I type this that doesn't sound like the most fair way to put it, because (ignoring Twilight) I feel Pinkie would be the one of the Mane Six who would go out of her way to accommodate Trixie more than anyone else. But it seems... hm.
When Avery Strange did Kindess' Reward, while it didn't replace Twixie as the OTP, by the end of the story you could really see how TrixieShy would work. Building Bridges did the same for TwiDash, which I had read in a couple of stories previously but up until it was written had never really bought.
At the end of this, it seems far more... Dammit. It seems contrived. And I really don't want to say that, because of the negative connotations of that word and because I can almost see why it works. To be sure, you've done a good job justifying it for this story. But in the end it still seems like the only reason it worked is because of what specifically happened in this story (and Trixie's backstory for this story) rather than any actual compatibility between the two, and that sorta bothers me.
When Avery Strange did Kindess' Reward, while it didn't replace Twixie as the OTP, by the end of the story you could really see how TrixieShy would work. Building Bridges did the same for TwiDash, which I had read in a couple of stories previously but up until it was written had never really bought.
At the end of this, it seems far more... Dammit. It seems contrived. And I really don't want to say that, because of the negative connotations of that word and because I can almost see why it works. To be sure, you've done a good job justifying it for this story. But in the end it still seems like the only reason it worked is because of what specifically happened in this story (and Trixie's backstory for this story) rather than any actual compatibility between the two, and that sorta bothers me.
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